please help me check the mistakes for the letter..........

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This is a letter I've wrote for the teacher's day in my country. Could you please help me check whether there are mistakes or something not good, not normal in grammar structure, common words....Thank you so much.

"Today is the morning of Viet Nam Teacher's day, it' 9:07 .

On this occasion, I want to to write something for this day superseding something I don't know what to have to do today.

First of all, Id like to pass on my heartfelt obliged thanks to the teachers who have been deserving credit for teaching us, equiping the necessary knowledge for us to get ready to enter the true life, helping us succeed in life. A life with so many complexitis I can't imagine in the age of taking bag to school.

Reminisce a bit; that age is so nice. To tell you the truth, my 3 buddies and I used to be reproached usually because of joking, talking each other much in class. We sat at the back of class. Everyday, we joked, laughed so many that our jaw got tired; incredible ...... There was one time we were expeled from class and weren't allowed entered the class from then on by the teacher teaching french although she warn us before. She was very strict and difficult to approach. We took many times to get her home to entreat her to let us enter the next class. Firstly, she didn't agree resolutely, but we were also very dogged to sit in front of her house from the afternoon to the evening(haha, so funny). Finally, we overcame her. Now, I also miss them much, one guy one way. The above story is just one of the many stories took place funnily during white-shirt period. There were many things I want to tell everybody, but I can't narrate at one moment and by english because of my limited english ability. By the way, these things I wrote by english not that I show off, just because I want to practice, and I feel easier when I want to tell everybody the things in my mind. That's it.

Get back to the principal topic, I hope the teachers may read these messages which are considered the flowers I offer you respectful. I don't know what to tell more except my wishes intended for all of you. My friends and I wish you a great health, always being happy to train up the useful people.

Respectful."

BarbaraPA · Accepted Answer

It's a nice thought, but it's riddled with errors. Can you not write something a lot more simple and from the heart?

Today is the morning of Viet Nam Teacher's Day. It' 9:07 .

On this occasion, I want to to write something for this day superseding something I don't know what to have to do today. I have no idea what this is trying to say. superceding what?

First of all, I'd like to pass on my heartfelt ~~obliged~~ thanks to our ~~the~~ teachers, who have ~~been deserving credit for teaching us,~~ equipping us with the knowledge necessary for us to ~~get ready to enter the true~~ ~~real~~ ~~life, helping us~~ succeed in life -- a life with so many complexities I can't imagine [in the age of taking bag to school. - I have no idea what this means either]

What comes next is rambling and incoherent and all about YOU and not your teachers. It's not a thank you note. "Finally we overcame her" is hardly a way to say that your teacher helped you. I would suggest you omit this entire paragraph!
Reminisce a bit; that age is so nice. To tell you the truth, my 3 buddies and I used to be reproached usually because of joking, talking each other much in class. We sat at the back of class. Everyday, we joked, laughed so many that our jaw got tired; incredible ...... There was one time we were expeled from class and weren't allowed entered the class from then on by the teacher teaching french although she warn us before. She was very strict and difficult to approach. We took many times to get her home to entreat her to let us enter the next class. Firstly, she didn't agree resolutely, but we were also very dogged to sit in front of her house from the afternoon to the evening(haha, so funny). Finally, we overcame her. Now, I also miss them much, one guy one way. The above story is just one of the many stories took place funnily during white-shirt period. There were many things I want to tell everybody, but I can't narrate at one moment and by english because of my limited english ability. By the way, these things I wrote by english not that I show off, just because I want to practice, and I feel easier when I want to tell everybody the things in my mind. That's it.

~~Get back to the principal topic,~~ I hope the teachers may read this messages ~~which are considered the~~ will think of it as if it were a flower that I respectfully offer you ~~respectful~~. I don't know what else to say ~~to tell more~~ except my wishes are intended for all of you. My friends and I wish you a great health and happiness always ~~being happy to train up the useful people~~.

Respectfully,

Anonymous · Answer

Thanks for your answer. I appreciate it. Now, I correct them like this. You see it's ok ?

Today is the morning of Viet Nam Teacher's day, it' 9:07 .

On this occasion, I want to to write something for this day superseding congratulation flowers.

First of all, Id like to pass on my heartfelt thanks to our teachers who have been equiping with the necessary knowledge for us to succeed in life - A life with so many complexities - I can't imagine.

Reminisce a bit; that age is so nice. To tell you the truth, my 3 buddies and I used to be reproached usually because of joking, talking each other much in class. We sat at the back of class. Everyday, we joked, laughed so many that our jaw got tired; incredible ...... There was one time we were expeled from class and weren't allowed entered the class from then on by the teacher teaching french although she warn us before. She was very strict and difficult to approach. We took many times to get her home to entreat her to let us enter the next class. Firstly, she didn't agree resolutely, but we were also very dogged to sit in front of her house from the afternoon to the evening(haha, so funny). Finally, we overcame.

Even though we acted like that, but they ( I have nearly 6 teacher teaching french for National exam; one teaches grammar, one teaches reading, one teaches listening, one teaches composition, ...) still cared of us. They coached me in French for Olympic exam, national exam with whole-heart... Finally, I gained the first price and came first in the test.

The above story is just one of the many stories took place funnily during white-shirt period. There were many things I want to tell everybody, but I can't narrate at one moment and by english because of my limited english ability. By the way, these things I wrote by english not that I show off, just because I want to practice, and I feel easier when I want to tell everybody the things in my mind. That's it.

I hope the teachers may read this message will think of it as a flower that I respectfully offer you. I don't know what else to say except my wishes are intended for all of you. My friends and I wish you a great health and happiness always.

Respectfully.

Thank you so much, !!!

please help me check the mistakes for the letter..........

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