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Topic The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years.

The line graph illustrates the amounts of waste output in tonnes by three different companies from 2000 to 2015.

As can be seen from the graph, there was similar downward trends in company A and B’s waste produced, while the amounts of waste output in company C witnessed a contrasting movement over the given period.

In the year 2000, the amounts of waste material of company A started at 12 tonnes, whereas the amount of waste was produced in company B and C begun at 8 and 4 tonnes. Over the subsequent five years, the figure for waste output of company A declined slightly to 11 tonnes, while there was a considerable climb in the amount of waste produced of company B and C, to 10 and 6 tonnes.

In addition, between 2005 and 2015 saw an enormous decrease in the figure for waste produced in company A and company B, to roughly 8 and 3 respectively. Finally, the amounts of waste material in company C increased gradually for the rest of period, from 6 to approximately 11 tonnes.

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The line graph illustrates (not a good word choice. Read my advice) the amounts of waste output in tonnes by three different companies from 2000 to 2015. (What are these companies?)

~~As can be seen from the graph,~~ (Delete. Read my advice) there was (wrong form) similar downward trends in company A and B’s waste ~~produced~~, while the amounts of waste ~~output in~~ from company C witnessed (wrong word. Read my advice. Waste cannot see, experience or witness anything!) a contrasting movement (unnatural) over the ~~given~~ (unnatural) period.

In the year 2000, the amounts (wrong form) of waste material of company A ~~started at~~ was 12 tonnes, whereas the amount of waste ~~was produced~~ in company B and C begun at 8 and 4 tonnes. Over the subsequent five years, the figure (wrong word. Read my advice. ) for waste output of company A declined slightly to 11 tonnes, while there was a considerable climb in the amount of waste produced by of company B and C, to 10 and 6 tonnes. (You do not need another paragraph.) In addition, between 2005 and 2015 saw (wrong word. Read my advice. Also, a prepositional phrase is not a good grammatical subject.) an enormous decrease in the figure (wrong word. Read my advice. ) for waste produced in company A and company B, to roughly 8 and 3 respectively. Finally, the amounts of waste ~~material~~ in company C increased gradually for the rest of period, from 6 to approximately 11 tonnes.

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Sample essay:

To get the highest scores in Task 1, you have to do some very basic arithmetic, not just copy values from the graph to the text.

Three paragraphs usually suffice: 1) Description of the figure, 2) main features, and 3) significant details (with comparisons.)

The line graph compares the waste production, in tonnes, of three companies, A, B and C, from 2000 to 2015.

Overall, the total amount of waste generated decreased over the period. Cuts by Companies A and B were offset by a large increase in Company C. In 2000, Company A produced the most, followed by B and C. The order was quite different in 2015, with Company C coming in highest, followed by A and then B.

In detail, the three generated 24 tonnes of waste in 2000; half of that was by Company A. and one-third by Company B. In 2015, the total was 3 tonnes less. Company B cut its waste by more than 60%, from 8 to 3 tonnes. Company A also went down by a third, from 12 to 8 tonnes. But waste production of Company C more than doubled, from 4 to 10 tonnes. The year 2005 had the highest total waste production, 27 tonnes. Company B had a peak at 10 tonnes, and Company C had also gone up from 4 to 6 tonnes.

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