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The chart below shows waste collection by a recycling centre from 2011 to 2015.The bar chart compares the amount of four different kinds of waste collected by a recycling centre in 4 years times, from 2011 to 2015.Overall, there were increases in the proportion of four kinds of waste. While garden waste always had the lowest proportion, the figure for the paper was usually the highest.Starting at 57 tons in 2011, the proportion of paper waste had a dig to 40 tons in 2013 before climbing to 70 tons in 2015, holding the largest amount out of the four categories. Similarly, the amount of garden rubbish slightly rose from 32 tons in 2013 to 35 tons in 2015 despite having two declines in 2012 and 2014, with 15 tons and 27 tons respectively, remaining the smallest figure during the examined period.There was also a climb in the proportion of glass and tins waste although these changes were not considerable, with the amount of glass waste increasing from 48 tons in 2011 to 52 tons in 2015 and the figure for tins growing to 39 tons in 2015 while 35 tons in 2011.

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The bar chart compares the amount in tons of four different kinds of waste collected by a recycling centre in each year ~~in 4 years times~~, from 2011 to 2015.

Overall, there were increases in the proportion (Wrong word. The values are absolute numbers, not relative proportions.) of four kinds of waste. While garden waste always had the lowest proportion, the figure (wrong word. ) Did you read my advice for Task 1 vocabulary?) for ~~the~~ paper was usually the highest.

Starting at 57 tons in 2011, the proportion of paper waste had a dig (wrong word. ) to 40 tons in 2013 before climbing to 70 tons in 2015, holding (wrong word. ) the largest amount ~~out~~ of the four categories. Similarly, the amount of garden rubbish ~~slightly~~ rose from 32 tons in 2013 to 35 tons in 2015 despite ~~having two declines~~ a decline in both 2012 and 2014, with 15 tons and 27 tons respectively, remaining the smallest figure ~~during the examined~~ (wrong word. ) ~~period~~.

There was also a climb in the proportion of glass and tins waste although these changes were not considerable, with the amount of glass waste increasing from 48 tons in 2011 to 52 tons in 2015 and the figure for tins growing to 39 tons in 2015 while 35 tons in 2011.

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The time-series bar chart compares the amounts (in tons) of four different kinds of waste (paper, glass, tins and garden) collected by a recycling centre annually from 2011 to 2015.

Overall, the total tonnage collected increased from 172 tons in 2011 to 196 tons in 2015. In those years, waste paper had the largest proportion of all four types, around one-third of the total, and leaves and trimmings from gardens the least, under one-fifth.

In detail, there was a decline in all types from 2011 to 2012. Notably, garden waste in 2012 was less than half that of 2011, 15 compared to 32 tons. The decrease in paper collected was less dramatic, going from 57 to 50 tons. But it continued to fall in the following year, 2013, amounting to 40 tons. From that low point, it went up by 75% over the next two years, ending at 70 tons. The year 2013 was an exception in that it was the only time when paper dipped to second place, below glass. The amounts of glass and tins varied within a relatively narrow range, between 41 and 52 tons for the former and 27 to 39 tons for the latter.

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