Please help me check my ielts writing task 1

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The line graph shows the past and projected borrowings for The Royal Bank of Scotland. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.The line graph illustrates the borrowing for the Royal Bank of Scotland over the period of 8 years from 2012 to 2020 and predicted to 2020.Overall, student loans and mortgages show the upward trend and such trend is predicted in the future. Meanwhile, a reverse pattern can be seen in auto loans and personal loans.in 2012, student loans hold the highest point at 1400, which was 500 lower than the runner up– mortgages. The former and latter rose steeply to 2100 and 1700 in 2020 respectively. Both figures are projected to experienced gradual rise to 2500 and 1400 in that order. It noticed that student loans take the lead.In contrast, auto loans started off 800 before fluctuating between 600 to 1100. Although this figure rocketed to 1500 in 2020, it is projected to lost momentum and plummet to its rock bottom at 600 and remain stable in 2 year later. Though Personal loans hold the lowest point in 2012, it reached a peak of 80 in 2016 before declining slightly to 500 in 2020. This figure is forecasted to continue falling until it reach its original point.

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Please read my advice for Task 1 essays. You need a better vocabulary resource for task 1.

Also, when you mention data values, be sure to write the correct numbers, including units of measure.

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The line graph illustrates (Not a good word. Read my advice for "line graph" verbs.) the borrowing for the Royal Bank of Scotland over the period of 8 (8 is not a data value. Write it in words) eight years from 2012 to 2020 and predicted to 2020. (That makes no sense. How can the measured data be to 2020 and the predicted data in the same year - 2020?)

You first paragraph is incomplete. What are the categories of loans? How many are there? What are the units of measure? If there are no units of measure given in the figure or the instructions, this Task 1 is not an actual IELTS task. Do not do these "made up" Tasks. They are confusing and will not be good practice.

Ð? Th? Ngh?The line graph shows the past (??) and projected borrowings for The Royal Bank of Scotland.

This is a faulty test.

1. The word "borrowings" is not good. It should be "loans". The Bank loans money to individuals and businesses; it does not borrow money.

2. It does not tell you the year that the projections begin. That is confusing and faulty.

Ð? Th? Ngh?Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

This line is on every IELTS Task 1 essay. It is just copied.

Do not use this source for your practice IELTS tests. The person who wrote the test is probably not a native speaker. They do not know how to write proper sample essays.

Overall, student loans and mortgages show an ~~the~~ upward trend which ~~and such trend~~ is predicted to continue into the future. Meanwhile, the reverse pattern can be seen in auto loans and personal loans.

in 2012, student loans hold the highest point at 1400, which was 500 lower than the runner up

– mortgages. The former and latter rose steeply to 2100 and 1700 in 2020 respectively. Both figures are projected to experienced gradual rise to 2500 and 1400 in that order. It noticed that student loans take the lead.

– mortgages. The former and latter rose steeply to 2100 and 1700 in 2020 respectively. Both figures (wrong word) are projected to experienced (wrong word) gradual rise to 2500 and 1400 in that order. It noticed that student loans take the lead. (wrong expression)

In contrast, auto loans started off 800 before fluctuating (wrong word) between 600 to 1100. Although this figure rocketed (wrong words) to 1500 in 2020, it is projected to lost momentum and plummet (wrong word) to its rock bottom (wrong word) at 600 and remain stable in 2 year (wrong form) later. Though Personal loans hold the lowest point in 2012, it (wrong word) reached a peak of 80 in 2016 before declining slightly to 500 in 2020. This figure (wrong word) is forecasted to continue falling until it reach its original point.

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