Please help me check my email and give some feedbacks

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Dear Eileen,It's been a while since you last met. How have you been doing?I was glad to receive your email and hear all your news.I'm good, my study is goes well and I'm gonna have an English exam at school next week so now I'm trying my best to get high score.There some ways for you to enhance you speaking skill such as you have to speak to the Vietnamese as much as possible, don't be afraid of making mistakes as they'll help you to correct them. Additionally, you can make some Vietnamese friends as they would help you to broaden your vocabulary and Vietnamese cultures. You can get materials from the bookshops with reasonable price or on the Internet.I hope your speaking ability will be improved significanlty. I have to get back to study now. Drop me a line soon.All the best,Nhu

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emi2222It's been a while since you last met. How have you been doing?I was glad to receive your email and hear all your news.

"It's been a while since we last met. How have you been doing? I was glad to receive your email and hear all your news."

emi2222I'm good, my study is goes well and I'm gonna have an English exam at school next week so now I'm trying my best to get high score.

"I'm good. School is going well, and I'm going to have an English exam next week, so now I'm trying my best to get a high score."

"I'm good" is ungrammatical, but nobody cares about this one in informal English. Your study would be a research project, and I don't think you meant that. Never write "gonna". You need a comma before a coordinating conjunction introducing an independent clause. If you were trying to get high score (no article), you would be trying to get the highest score of anyone in your school. You want a high score.

emi2222There some ways for you to enhance you speaking skill such as you have to speak to the Vietnamese as much as possible, don't be afraid of making mistakes as they'll help you to correct them.

"There are ways for you to enhance your speaking skill, such as speaking to the Vietnamese as much as possible. Don't be afraid of making mistakes, as they'll help you to correct them."

Your first clause did not have a verb in it. "Some" was not what you meant. That pesky comma. "You have to speak" is not a way. Comma splice.

emi2222Additionally, you can make some Vietnamese friends as they would help you to broaden your vocabulary and Vietnamese cultures.

"Also, you can make some Vietnamese friends, as they would help you to broaden your vocabulary and learn about Vietnamese culture."

"Additionally" was not quite right. There's that comma, again. You didn't mean "broaden Vietnamese cultures". I changed "cultures" to "culture" because "culture" is ordinarily non-count in this setting, but if you mean the various cultures within the country, then change it back.

emi2222 You can get materials from the bookshops with reasonable price or on the Internet.

"You can get materials from the bookshops at a reasonable price or for free on the Internet."

emi2222I hope your speaking ability will be improved significanlty. I have to get back to study now. Drop me a line soon.

"I hope your speaking ability will be improved significantly. I have to get back to studying now. Drop me a line soon."

Typo. "Get back to study" was not wrong if you take "study" to be a noun, but nobody would, and it reads like an unidiomatic infinitive, "to study".

By the way, "feedback" is unalterably non-count. What I did up there was give you feedback, not feedbacks, which is not a word. If you want a plural, I gave you pointers and corrections.

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