Please help me check my covering letter

I am applying for Investment banking risk graduate programme and would appreciate if someone could look over my covering letter. Thank you for helping!

Dear Mr. / Ms. [Recruiter’s Name],

My name is [] and I am currently a Financial Mathematic Postgraduate at [] Business School. I recently met [] from the Risk Analysis group at [] during a presentation at our school last week, and was impressed with your over [] earning and [] long-term credit rating. I am interested in joining the Risk Graduate Programme at your firm, and have enclosed my resume and background information below.

I have previously worked as client manager at [] Security Brokerage Ltd. and research assistant at [] Ventures Group. Through these experiences on working directly with clients, performing quantitative analysis and creating investment model, I have honed my knowledge of portfolio and risk management, and developed negotiating, analytical and problem-solving skills. At [], I also had the opportunity to work on the establishment of the first National Fund of Funds, the total size of which will amount to [] billion RMB.

Given my background in security brokerage and investment management and my negotiating, analytical and problem-solving skills, I am a particularly good fit for the IB risk graduate position at your firm. I am impressed by your track record of transactions at [] and the significant responsibilities given to graduate, and I look forward to joining and contributing to your firm.

A copy of my resume is enclosed for your reference. I would welcome an opportunity to discuss my qualifications with you and learn more about [] at your earliest convenience. I can be reached at [] or via email at []. Thank you very much for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,

[]

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Enclosure: Resume