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Jiangyueming Posted 14 years ago
Grammar

Please help me by correcting these sentences. Thank you!

I have a cousin named Jack. Both his mother and father are well-educated. Once Jack had a problem that he didn't know how to translate an English sentence into Chinese. His mother told him the answer without hesitation. However, when the same question appeared on the exam, Jack forgot how to translate it. This was because he didn't absorb the knowledge completely. Since then, his mother always encouraged him to work independently. Two months later, he made a great progress in English exams.
  

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Try not to have short sentences, unless you are purposely doing so to create some mood or effect. Longer sentences give a sense of flow(= to proceed smoothly, continuously, and effortlessly) to a narrative. I have a cousin named Jack.

— Terryxpress

  • Try not to have short sentences, unless you are purposely doing so to create some mood or effect.
  • Longer sentences give a sense of flow(= to proceed smoothly, continuously, and effortlessly) to a narrative.
  • I have a cousin named Jack.
  • Both his mother and father are well-educated .
  • I have a cousin named Jack, whose parents are both well-educated.
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Try not to have short sentences, unless you are purposely doing so to create some mood or effect. Longer sentences give a sense of flow(= to proceed smoothly, continuously, and effortlessly) to a narrative.
I have a cousin named Jack. Both his mother and father are well-educated.
I have a cousin named Jack, whose paren
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Thank you so much. Here is my revision:
1. After two months, he made progress in the following English exams.
2. Since then, his mother always encourages him to do homework independently.
3. Sorry, for this sentence "This was because he didn't absorb the knowledge completely.", I don't know why the Past Tense is preferable. "Hadn't absorbed" seems okay to me. Can you tell the reaso
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Here's my suggested phrasing (and feel free to ask me why I made some specific change); and note how I joined the sentences to make the narrative flow:
Thereafter, his mother always encouraged him to work independently, and within two months, he had made great progress in exams.

Sorry, for this sentence "This was because
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What do you mean by "my two icons this time, but not that **** angel"?
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Because I did include two icons: a smiley and thumbs up. But the word processor itself substituted an icon of an angel for what I typed, which was (a).

It's done it again. What I typed was 'a' inside a set of brackets.
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