Please help me by correcting my CV. Many thanks

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OBJECTIVEShort-term Objective- Graduating university with Good degree.- Earning knowledges and experiences in area of expertise.Long-term Objective:- Becoming a specialist in the marketing industry.EDUCATIONUniverstiy of Finance and MarketingAugust 2018 – Present- Third year student major in Integrated Marketing Communications- GPA: 3.62/4EXPERIENCESPDCA Ltd.Event Organiger Collaborator: October 2018 – July 2020Responsibilities included:- Guiding and support students in training courses.- Preparing documents for student and other arising jobs.Communications Collabrator for 1000 CEO Event: October 2019 – November 2019Responsibilities included:- Producing content for Email marketing, Facebook posts, PR writting.- Supporting design team makes online tickets.Marketing Collabrator: December 2019 – June 2020Responsibilities included:- Planning and Producing content for communications channels such as: Facebook, Email, Website.- Managing Company’s Fanpage and Youtube channel.- Supporting the production of a number of media publications.- Setting up KPI for myself base on Marketing Deparment’s plan.Vietsun Blind Ltd.Content Collabrator: August 2019Responsibilities included:- Producing SEO content for Products of Company’s website.ACTIVITIESEvent Club of Marketing: August 2018 – May 2020- Content team member in School's Event Club- Planning and Executing events for students at university such as: Ua! Sai Gon 2, Board Game ON…Event Orgenizer Collabrator:Mat Bao JSC: Event: “Kinh doanh thuc chien thoi dai so”Son Kim Land: Event: “Unlock the future”LANGUAGE:- 540 TOEICSKILL:- Office: Upper Intermediate- Design: Intermediate - Use quite well Ps, AI, Pr.- Teamwork: Good. Sociable, well-connected with other members.- Time management: Good at planning and managing time.

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I have highlighted the text with problems. I have also included some comments hoping that you will change the CV.

Short-term Objective

- Graduating university with a degree in Business Administration and a minor in computer science. Overall grade point average greater than 3.5/4.0 ~~Good degree~~.

- working two internships (six weeks each) in a major company to gain work experience

- ~~Earning knowledges~~ (knowledge is non-count. And you cannot earn it.) ~~and experiences in area of expertise.~~ (That makes no sense)

- Improve my English to score above 900 on the TOEIC test.

Long-term Objective:

- Becoming a specialist in ~~the~~ international marketing ~~industry~~. (Marketing is a subject with many different specialties. It is not an industry. See the definition https://www.ama.org/the-definition-of-marketing-what-is-marketing/#:~:text=Marketing%20is%20the%20activity%2C%20set,%2C%20and%20society%20at%20large.%20(:

EDUCATION

Universtiy of Finance and Marketing

August 2018 – Present (Were you a third-year student for more than two years? Did you fail some courses in 2018 and 2019?)

- Third year student major in Integrated Marketing Communications

- GPA: 3.62/4

EXPERIENCES(Experience is non-count.)

PDCA Ltd.

Event Organiger Collaborator: October 2018 – July 2020

Responsibilities included:

- Guiding and support students in training courses.

- Preparing documents for student (Which one student?) and other arising jobs. (That does not make sense)

Communications Collabrator for 1000 CEO Event: October 2019 – November 2019

Responsibilities included:

- Producing content for Email marketing, Facebook posts, PR (Do not use acronyms - they can be ambiguous. writting.

- Supporting design team makes online tickets. (Ungrammatical. It is not clear what you actually did.)

Marketing Collabrator: December 2019 – June 2020

Responsibilities included:

- Planning and Producing content for communications channels such as: Facebook, Email, Website.

- Managing the company’s Fanpage and Youtube channel.

- Supporting the production of a number of media publications. (Be specific. "support" is very vague)

- Setting up KPI for myself base on Marketing Deparment’s plan.

Vietsun Blind Ltd.

Content Collabrator: August 2019

Responsibilities included:

- Producing SEO content for Products of Company’s website. (That makes no sense.

ACTIVITIES

Event Club of Marketing: August 2018 – May 2020 (club of marketing does not make sense in English)

- Content team member in School's Event Club

- Planning and Executing events for students at university such as: Ua! Sai Gon 2, Board Game ON…

(Do not use ellipses in formal writing. "Executing an event" does not make sense. Did you collect tickets or sign people in or what?)

Event Orgenizer Collabrator:

Mat Bao JSC: Event: “Kinh doanh thuc chien thoi dai so”

Son Kim Land: Event: “Unlock the future”

LANGUAGE:

- 540 TOEIC

https://www.ef.com/wwen/english-tests/toeic/score/

If you took the TOEIC in order to apply for a job, as many people do, you will have to decide once you have your results whether or not your TOEIC score will make your CV stronger. If you put a low TOEIC score on your CV that will make your application weaker, so it would be better to put no TOEIC score in that case.

So what counts as a “high” TOEIC score? It very much depends on the country in which you are applying for a job and the job requirements. Most people take the Listening & Reading TOEIC for professional purposes. A TOEIC score of 900 or more is a high score in almost all cases and for almost all jobs. As a rule of thumb, you should include a TOEIC of 900 points or more on your CV.

SKILL:

- Office: Upper Intermediate

- Design: Intermediate - Use quite well Ps, AI, Pr.

- Teamwork: Good. Sociable, well-connected with other members.

- Time management: Good at planning and managing time.

Please help me by correcting my CV. Many thanks

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