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Scene 2

Characters :

Police Sergeant – Mohammad

Policeman – Played by Daniel



*Scene 2 starts in the police Sergeant office, a policeman has just caught a suspect and is reporting to the sergeant.*



Policeman: Good morning, Sir salutes, I have just caught another aboriginal dirty suspect today.



Sergeant: Okay, give me your report, and the evidence you have on him.



Policeman: Gives the police sergeant a small piece of paper This is the visual evidence that I got hold from the suspect. Up until now nothing has been confirmed, there are no real evidence.



Sergeant: No real evidence ha?



Policeman: It is just that I couldn't let him get away with it. If he hasn't done it. I have a sense that he made a major contribution?



Sergeant: Okay, Fair enough, What is the suspect’s name and background?



Policeman: His name is Ambrose Mcaee, and belongs to the aboriginal community in the western side, I caught him on in the city, he was fleeing from an assault scene.



Sergeant: Yeah well I don't care about the details as long as you caught another boong. I will complete the paperwork now. While I do that throw that ‘thing’ into the jail.



Policeman: Will do sir. May I go now.



Sergeant: Yes you may, the police man is walking towards the door and the Sergeant remebers something Oh one more thing, I just would like to remind you to keep your eyes wide opened for the next few days. There will be a festival held by an aboriginal tribe near the Logone river, take group 648 and keep them company.



Policeman: Are you expecting anything?



Sergeant: No, not really, just watch out if anything goes wrong and interrupt whenever possible. Those crooks just do not deserve to have a happy festival without troubles.



Policeman: Of course sir, I understand.



Sergeant: Good, thank you for your cooperation in our campaign in wiping them out of our streets.



Policeman: Thank you sir, this is my duty as a policeman and will be for the rest of my life.



Sergeant: Can you hear that noise outside or is it my mind playing tricks.



Policeman: No sir, that is him outside, Ambrose Mcaee. He strongly insisted to see you from the second I came down here and has been criticizing ever since. He believes he has not committed any crime. He thought that it is one of his rights to see you and it is not fair to throw him in the Jail and bring up here without any evidence.



Sergeant: He angrily speaks Who on earth does he think he is to meet me! He is no one he just came to life to add a load to it. His type does not have something called rights. He is just not legible for that title. Bring him inside; let me teach him some new lessons for his life.



Policeman: Will do sir, sorry for this.



OPRESSION



Scene 3

Characters :

Police Sergeant – Mohammad

Ambrose– Played by Daniel



Ambrose is allowed to enter the Sergeant's office.



Ambrose: Good morning sir, I just wanted to….. interrupted by the Sergeant.



Sergeant: Shut up! I didn’t give you any permission to speak! And why would you resist to something you have committed. You are a suspect, if not a criminal, and you deserve to be detained.



Ambrose: Sir, but I have not……interrupted again



Sergeant: How about we extend your residence here for another 10 days, what do you think you …..



Sergeant picks the phone up and makes a call to the government, trying to persuade them to extend his detention* This is Sergeant, Daniel, from the Gravatt office, I just would like to clarify some things. Today we caught another aboriginal criminal….. Ambrose interrupt.



Ambrose: A criminal, what? I didn’t commit any crime, I have not done anything; Before two seconds, I was a suspect, Now I am a criminal! This ….he is interrupted by the Sergeant



Sergeant: Do you want to stay here for another month, a year, a decade, I don’t mind mate, now shut that dirty mouth up and let me finish my speech and DO NOT interrupt, of course, for your own safety and residency here. * Sergeant picks the phone again and remove his hand from the microphone*, Sorry sir the criminal is very active today and he keeps on denying. He is definitely on drugs, and we decided to put him for another 3 months so this wouldn't happen again. This is just to keep our streets clean from these people, well those odd people! * Sergeant waits for the response on the phone* Thanks sir, pass my greetings to Sir, Josh and Mr. Ricky, Goodbye.



Now that I have a permission, to detain you, would you still resist? I don’t know about that!



Ambrose: Sir, look at it from another angle, from another perspective, imagine if a white person was standing in front of you would you do whatever you have done to me today.



Sergeant: Of course not, he is white, you are aboriginal! There is a huge difference. Can you see it or haven’t they taught you how to contrast in school, you probably didn’t go to school, right!



Ambrose: No sir, but this was because …… interrupted



Sergeant: I don’t care whatever the reason was, we are not here for your lives history sorry your filthy lives history. My blood pressure was already up this morning and now it has flooded me, now get outside and stop denying. You are a criminal, you have committed a crime in George street this morning and you are going to be detained for three months, FULL STOP. I am making myself clear here!



Ambrose: But sir, I mean Mr Daniel, please ......interrupted again



Sergeant: No, no more sirs and don't say my name. I want to keep it clean from contamination. The jail door is opened for you and I can promise you that If you are argue one more time, you will be severely punished.



Ambrose looks into the eyes of the sergeant, the sergeant looks very angrily in his eyes. His head then drops and walks outside