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The items (1) to (5) below contain errors/possible weaknesses of grammar, word choice, etc. Please: a) point out the errors/weaknesses (two in each item); b) explain clearly why they are errors/weaknesses, for example, what writing principles are violated; and c) provide possible corrections/improvements of the errors.

1. The shipment is to be delivered by Ater Logistics sometime this winter.

2. Kumar is certainly generous as an Indian, in donating to the church, contributing to the needy, and to help the single mothers.

3. It has come to my attention that it would appear someone apparently entered the office illegally last night.

4. This is to let you know that you should feel free to use your credit card for the purpose of pursuing electronic appliances for a period of 65 days.

5. Please do not forget that identification passes must be worn at all times in offices and production facilities showing the employee’s picture.

Much Much thanks!

MalRey · Accepted Answer

This looks like your homework. Please try it yourself and post your answers then I'm sure someone will help you correct them.

Mattsum · Answer

Here below is my answer to part (c). Since the mode of teaching here (by memorize things), I'm not quite sure what to say about "writing principles are violated" or "explain cleary why there are errors/weakness", I need someone to point me out what should answer in part (a) & (b). Here below are my answer to (c), please help.

1. The shipment will be delivered by Ater Logistics in this winter.

2. Kumar is certainly the generous as an Indian, he donating to the church, in contributing to the needy, and in helping the single mothers.

or rewrite: Kumar, who donating to the church, contributing to the needy and helping the single mothers, is certainly the generous as an Indian.

3. It has come to my attention that it appears someone illegally entered the office last night.

or rewrite: It has come to my attention that someone apparently broke into the office illegally last night.

4. Please feel free to use your credit card in pursuing electronic appliances for a period of 65 days.

5. Please be reminded that identification passes showing the employee’s picture, must be worn at all times in offices and production facilities.

Thanks helping in advance!

MalRey · Answer

Note spelling corrections and changes in wording and punctuation. Note also that these sentences can be worded and punctuated in a variety of ways and your teacher may have other changes in mind.

1. The shipment will be delivered by Ater Logistics sometime this winter.

2. Kumar is certainly generous as an Indian in donating to the church, contributing to the needy, and helping single mothers. I have to say, I don't know what being an Indian has to do with the rest of the sentence.

3. It has come to my attention that someone entered the office illegally last night.

4. This is to let you know that you should feel free to use your credit card to purchase electronic appliances for a period of 65 days.

5. Please do not forget that identification passes must be worn at all times in offices and production facilities.

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