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Mlana Posted 14 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Please help edit this response for a college App question
I am apply to Saint Norbert College, and the question: "What influenced you to apply to St. Norbert College?" was asked. Please criticize it a lot, I want to sound amazing when I apply!
I've had the privilege of being a part of a pre-college program, Upward Bound (TRIO) at UWSP, for four years. Every year the program takes us on college tours to numerous campuses, and one year Saint Norbert was on the list. I was familiar with the existence of this college from my History teacher, who‘s child attends there, and because one of the staff members at Upward Bound had attended SNC. Their talk of the beauty and academic excellence of the campus paired with my “love at first sight” feeling after touring the campus and learning that I would not be just a number, drove me to apply as soon as possible.
I've had the privilege of being a part of a pre-college program, Upward Bound (TRIO) at UWSP, for four years. Every year the program takes us on college tours to numerous campuses, and one year Saint Norbert was on the list. I was familiar with the existence of this college from my History teacher, who‘s child attends there, and because one of the staff members at Upward Bound had attended SNC. Their talk of the beauty and academic excellence of the campus paired with my “love at first sight” feeling after touring the campus and learning that I would not be just a number, drove me to apply as soon as possible.
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Hello, Mlana—and welcome to English Forums. You may comment that you toured the campus with Upward Bound, but otherwise you must offer more serious academic and cultural reasons why the college specifically matches your goals. I think you should start again on this.
- Hello, Mlana—and welcome to English Forums.
- You may comment that you toured the campus with Upward Bound, but otherwise you must offer more serious academic and cultural reasons why the college specifically matches your goals.
- I think you should start again on this.
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Hello, Mlana—and welcome to English Forums.
You may comment that you toured the campus with Upward Bound, but otherwise you must offer more serious academic and cultural reasons why the college specifically matches your goals. I think you should start again on this.
You may comment that you toured the campus with Upward Bound, but otherwise you must offer more serious academic and cultural reasons why the college specifically matches your goals. I think you should start again on this.
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