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Tuongvan Posted 18 years ago
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00For a virtuous person, if wanting to be perfect in virtue, he must reject troubles from surroundings; if wanting to improve morals, he is supposed to acquire industry, thrift, honesty, and righteousness; if not disregarding glory and wealth, he will never be able to identify his own life-mottoes; if not rejecting troubles from surroundings, he will never be progressive.He needs to be undisturbed in mind when studying; talents spring from studying. 02br
00If studying without aims, never are achievements obtained in studying. Being lazy cannot make mind excited, and personality cannot be trained if being impatient to see achievements.02br
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00We will get old when time goes by; will is also gradually exhausted with time, and it finally fades and falls like leaves. Most of the people who cannot take over career from their ancestors will be grieved and live a poor life at the end, and there's no chance for them to regret then. 02br
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02br 01i 00I have underlined some problem areas. He needs to be undisturbed in mind when studying; talents spring from studying. 02br 01u 00If studying02u 00 without aims, never are achievements obtained in studying.

  • 02br 01i 00I have underlined some problem areas.
  • He needs to be undisturbed in mind when studying; talents spring from studying.
  • 02br 01u 00If studying02u 00 without aims, never are achievements obtained in studying.
  • 02br 02br 00We will get old when time goes by; will is also gradually exhausted with time, and it finally fades and falls like 01u 00leaves02u 00.
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01i00I have underlined some problem areas. You need to recast your sentences and eliminate the awkward or impossible '02i00' if...-ing01i00' phrase:02br
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00For a virtuous person01u00, if wanting02u00 to be perfect in virtue01u00, he 02u00must reject tro
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0Thank you Mister Micawber , your editing is very excellent .0-

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