please help - cover letter written by a german

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Hi all,could you please help me with my first cover letter - thanks to all in advance!!!----Application for reference no. XXXDear Hiring Manager,With great interest I read your job posting for a support engineer on the XXX career web site. With my experience and background, I am confident to make an immediate contribution to your team. I would like to give you an overview how well both my education and experience are appropriate for the position. As you will see from my enclosed Curriculum Vitae, I have successfully completed my professional technical education as an information scientist at XXX in Munich prior to my current position. During the practically oriented education I worked in the XXX as a support engineer. I performed problem resolution and troubleshooting services to big enterprise customers and XXX partners for Microsoft Exchange Server related problems. Furthermore I provided system set up and network environments for lab services in the XXX Services department. I was responsible the preparation of systems and providing technical solutions according customer requirements as well as for the monitoring and administration of the XXX datacenter. I offered solid experience with a range of different server technologies, operating systems and have expertise with a variety of software applications and hardware configurations.In my current position I am working at XXX as a Business Operation Engineer for the XXX Services. I am responsible for the preparation of Virtual Server / PC images, from the concept, about the realization up to improvement according to the growing user's base. Based on the mostly been asked Virtual Machines by the XXX Support Center and others,  I publish retail and beta  versions of Microsoft Operating Systems and Applications as well as in different languages on our Intranet for direct usage. Another task is the maintenance and development of the XXX intranet site. Beside aspects like availability, layout and content I take the customer interests and customer's requirements into consideration also for the migration of the Intranet site to SharePoint Portal which is full in progress. Furthermore I communicate important changes, escalations or news concerned our customers above the available communication ways.My technical knowledge gives me the advantage to understand the constantly changing requirements of the internal and external customers regularly review and to take effectively into consideration in my everyday work. Realizing that this letter, as well as my Curriculum Vitae, cannot adequately communicate my qualifications and skills in-depth, I would welcome the opportunity to meet with you personally and discuss the possibility to be a part of your team at XXX.Sincerely,XXX

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

Overall, very nicely done-- much of my work below is cosmetic. I don't understand your work precisely, though, so if I have made any egregious error of interpretation, be sure to change it back.

Application for Support Engineer (reference no. ***)

Dear Hiring Manager:

This letter is in application for the position of support engineer as posted on the *** career web site. With my experience and background, I am confident that I would be able to make an immediate contribution to your team. I would like to give you an overview of the appropriacy of both my education and experience to the position.

As you will see from my enclosed curriculum vitae, I successfully completed my professional technical education as an information scientist at *** in Munich prior to my current position. During this practically-oriented education, I worked in the *** as a support engineer. I performed problem resolution and troubleshooting services for large enterprise customers and *** partners with respect to Microsoft Exchange Server related problems.

Furthermore, I provided system setup and network environments for lab services in the *** service department. I was responsible for the preparation of systems and provision of technical solutions according to customer requirements, as well as for the monitoring and administration of the *** data center. I offered solid experience with a range of different server technologies and operating systems, and have expertise in a variety of software applications and hardware configurations.

My current position is at *** as a Business Operation Engineer for the *** Services. I am responsible for the preparation of Virtual Server / PC images, from the concept, through the realization, to improvement according to the growing user's [ I DON'T LIKE THIS UNDERLINED PHRASE, BUT DO NOT UNDERSTAND WELL ENOUGH TO OFFER AN ALTERNATIVE -- MM] base. Based on the most frequently requested virtual machines by the *** Support Center and others, I publish retail and beta versions of Microsoft Operating Systems and Applications (in different languages as well) on our Intranet for direct access. Another task is the maintenance and development of the *** intranet site. In addition to aspects like availability, layout and content, I also take customer interests and requirements into consideration for the migration of the Intranet site to SharePoint Portal, which process is fully underway. Furthermore, I communicate important changes, escalations and other news concerning our customers via these available communication methods.

My technical knowledge gives me the advantage of understanding the constantly changing requirements of internal and external customers, which I regularly review and take into consideration in my daily work. Realizing that this letter and my curriculum vitae cannot adequately communicate my qualifications and skills in-depth, I would welcome the opportunity to meet with you personally and discuss the possibility of becoming a part of your team at ***.

Yours faithfully,

Anonymous · Answer

Hello Mister Micawber,

thank you very much for the proof-read. Do you think that I can send it out now? I have not modified all phrases, but most of them

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Application for IT Support Engineer (reference no. W/05/103)

Dear Hiring Manager,

This letter is in application for the position of the IT Support Engineer as posted on the *** career web site. With my experience and background, I am confident that I would make an immediate contribution to your team. I am very interested in this position and would like to give you an overview how well my education and experience are appropriate for this position.

As you will see from my enclosed curriculum vitae, I successfully completed my professional technical education as an information scientist at *** in Munich prior to my current position. During this practically-oriented education, I worked in the *** Support Center as a support engineer. I performed problem resolution and troubleshooting services for large enterprise customers and *** partners with respect to Microsoft Exchange Server related problems.

Furthermore, I provided network environments and system setup for *** services in the *** Services department. I was responsible for the preparation of systems and provision of technical solutions according to customer requirements, as well as for the monitoring and administration of the *** data center. I offered solid experience with a range of different server technologies and operating systems, and have expertise in a variety of software applications and hardware configurations.

In my current position I am working at *** as a Business Operation Engineer for the *** Services. I am responsible for the preparation of Virtual Server / PC images, from the concept, through the realization, to improvement according to the growing user's base. Based on the most frequently requested virtual machines by the *** Support Center and others, I publish retail and beta versions of Microsoft Operating Systems and Applications (in different languages as well) on our Intranet for direct access. Another task is the maintenance and development of the *** Services intranet site. In addition to aspects like availability, layout and content, I also take customer interests requirements into consideration for the migration of the Intranet site to SharePoint Portal, which is in full process. Furthermore, I communicate important changes, escalations and other news concerning our customers via the available communication methods.

My technical knowledge gives me the advantage of understanding the constantly changing requirements of internal and external customers, which I regularly review and take into consideration in my daily work. Realizing that this letter and my curriculum vitae cannot adequately communicate my qualifications and skills in-depth, I would welcome the opportunity to meet with you personally and discuss the possibility of becoming a part of your team at ***.

Sincerely,

Mister Micawber · Answer

OK-- send it away, and good luck!

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