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Financial Aid Appeal

Content : Please write or type reasons for filing in the space provideed below. FINANCIAL NEED SHOULD NOT BE YOUR GROUNDS FOR THIS APPEAL. Therefore, state the situation and how it has been rectified. Also undicate how the past situation will not present any further delays in your educational goals.

I have the reasons for returning to college :-

Firstly, I found that my bachelor degree and work experienced from Thailand could not help me successfully finding a good job in USA.

Secondly, the job I had in retail store could not fullfill my financial need.

I would like to clerify my above reasons as following :-

I had worked in an area of office Administrative Assistant in thailand for 8 years before I moved to USA in 2001. When I first came here, I tried to applied for a job, started from a Clerk to Admin. Assistant, unfortunately, I've got no called from none of them. I finally realized that because I was new and never have experience working in the USA before.

While I was looking for a clerical job, I worked for the retail store in order to help my husband with some expenses. After 3 years of hard working with minimum payment, I realized that I could not go any firther unless I go back to school. I did my research and decided to enroll for fulltime study for career in healthcare. The loan I am applying for would help me with financial situation while I am studying.

I would be appreciate if you consider my request for my loan approvment. Thank you very much.

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Viv