PLEASE help correcting my Letter of motivation

So I rewrote my Letter of Motivation and I think it sounds better already. Anyway I would really appreciate every comment on it. Please help me to improve it!



Dear ladies and gentlemen

I am writing with regard to my application for the Hospitality Management Programme at the International University of Applied Sciences *****. During the programme, I hope to gain the knowledge and experience that are required nowadays for a successful start and to improve my English skills by means of the international campus and the year abroad you provide.

My interest in the hospitality branch comes predominantly from the fact that I want to work with people both as a staff member but also in relation to customers. In my present understanding, this means that I will have to be part of an organisation and have to organise myself but at the same time have to have in mind that there is a client to tend, whose needs have to be fulfilled. That is what makes the branch demanding and fascinating at the same time. On the one hand, the organisation and coordination of staff for “daily work” as well as for special events are required, and on the other hand, the development and realisation of new ideas for the customers. Furthermore, the hospitality branch is in a constant process of change, where new trends are set every year and management will have to react to them – an intriguing task.

In addition, I consider the enormous international possibilities for working abroad as formidable. All over the world, jobs are provided, and even though it is work, working in probably the most beautiful spots worldwide is a very attractive idea.

During my research I came about a poster from The International University of Applied Sciences *****and it made a magnificent impression; I appreciate the international campus, confronting the student with the English language not only during classes but also in everyday situations, the “One-year-abroad programme”, the modern surroundings providing an ideal learning milieu, a very practical-related education through the teachers practical experience, the events, e.g. a gala-dinner organised by students, the internships, and finally the impression of a little “elite-family”. All this together seems to be the perfect and best possible education and preparation conditions for the international hospitality branch and that is where I want to work for my future.

I hope, I was able to give you an impression of my motivation to chose the hospitality management programme on The International University of Applied Sciences Bad Honnef.

Yours sincerely

Thanks already for your suggestions

Jareck

edit a few things were corrected