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· Crew set up equipment at test pit location #5

· Crew began excavation on test hole #5A (North), an unknown wooden duct found to be at a depth of 3.60’.

· Test hole #5A (South) was an unknown wooden duct found to be at a depth of 3.694’.

· Test hole #5B was the edge of the tunnel at the bus terminal found to be at a depth of 5.74’.

· Test hole #5C was an unknown 4” cast iron pipe found to be at a depth of 3.78’.

· Test hole #5D (North) was an unknown wooden duct found to be at a depth of 3.250’.

· Test hole #5D (South) was an unknown wooden duct found to be at a depth of 3.250’.

· Test hole #5E was the top of the tunnel roof found to be at a depth of 6.40’.

· Soil conditions at test pit 5 were unstable causing excavation to be difficult.

Or should it read:

· Crew set up at test pit #5

· Crew began excavation on test hole #5A (north), which is a unknown wooden duct.

· Test hole #5A was located at a depth of 3.60’.

· Test hole #5A(south) is a unknown wooden duct found at a depth of 3.694’.

· Test hole #5B is the edge of tunnel of the bus terminal, it was located at a depth of 5.74’.

· Test hole #5C is an unknown 4” cast iron pipe located at a depth of 3.78’.

· Test hole #5D (north) is an unknown wooden duct located at a depth of 3.250’.

· Test hole #5D (south) is an unknown wooden duct located at a depth of 3.250’.

· Test hole #5E is the top of tunnel roof located at a depth 6.40’.

· Soil conditions are very unstable and made excavating difficult.

Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi Rome,

Welcome to the Forum.

It would help us to know what this relates to, what its title is.

· Crew set up equipment at test pit location #5

· Crew began excavation on test hole #5A (North), an unknown wooden duct found to be at a depth of 3.60’. How can a hole 'be' a duct?

· Test hole #5A (South) was an unknown wooden duct found to be at a depth of 3.694’.

· Test hole #5B was the edge of the tunnel at the bus terminal found to be at a depth of 5.74’. Again, how can a hole 'be' an edge? Do you mean you dug the hole 'at' the edge of the tunnel? The same comment applies to your other bullets.

· Test hole #5C was an unknown 4” cast iron pipe found to be at a depth of 3.78’.

· Test hole #5D (North) was an unknown wooden duct found to be at a depth of 3.250’.

· Test hole #5D (South) was an unknown wooden duct found to be at a depth of 3.250’.

· Test hole #5E was the top of the tunnel roof found to be at a depth of 6.40’.

· Soil conditions at test pit 5 were unstable, causing excavation to be difficult.

Or should it read:

· Crew set up at test pit #5

· Crew began excavation on test hole #5A (north), which is a unknown wooden duct.

· Test hole #5A was located at a depth of 3.60’.

· Test hole #5A(south) is a unknown wooden duct found at a depth of 3.694’.

· Test hole #5B is the edge of tunnel of the bus terminal, it was located at a depth of 5.74’.

· Test hole #5C is an unknown 4” cast iron pipe located at a depth of 3.78’.

· Test hole #5D (north) is an unknown wooden duct located at a depth of 3.250’.

· Test hole #5D (south) is an unknown wooden duct located at a depth of 3.250’.

· Test hole #5E is the top of tunnel roof located at a depth 6.40’.

· Soil conditions are very unstable and made excavating difficult.

The Past Tense version seems better to me. You are describing what you did at a past time.

Best wishes, Clive

Rome · Answer

It would help us to know what this relates to, what its title is.

This all relates to a project which consisted of test holes, which were used to locate various underground utilities.

A co-worker and I were wondering what would be the best way to a bullet list for future projects.

The word "was" makes me think that the utility in question possibly isn't there anymore.

We would like to eliminate any questions that may arise.

Thanks again !!!!!!!!!!!!!1

Goodman · Answer

I have been in equipment engineering and maintenance for over 15 years. Writing procedures is one of my responsibilities. From reading your last post, it sounded to me that what you need is a routine maintenance checklist to guide the person who is doing the actual work through the tasks. However, in order to generate this checklist, you must have a decent level of the tasks to be performed because the checklist should be compiled in a logical sequence. For instance, if I were to write a simple checklist for installing a brand-new washer out of a box, I would write something like this which will have a combination of bullet and checklist:

Kenmore Washer model - 1234 Installation

1) Part inventory ___

· Power cord ___

· Drain hose

· Hose clamps ___

2) Inspect parts for defect before installation ___

3) Connect power cord to power panel ___

4) Test machine for proper functions ___

· Wash cycle ___

· Rinse Cycle ___

· Spin dry cycle ___

Rome · Answer

We have a daily checklist.

we're looking to put this in a daily summary for the events that took place in bullet form.

Rome · Answer

I've replaced "was" with revealed.

3-17-2006:
•Crew set up equipment at test pit location #7.

•Crew excavated test hole #7D, which revealed a 4” cast iron duct found to be at a depth of 3.125’.

•Test hole #7E revealed a 4” cast iron duct found to be at a depth of 3.085’.

•Test hole #7F revealed a 4” cast iron duct found to be at a depth of 3.084’

•Crew began excavation on test hole #9C, which revealed the top of the tunnel roof, found to be at a depth of 8.61’.

•Crew proceeded to excavate test hole #9D, which revealed the north edge of an electrical concrete duct bank, found to be at a depth of 5.22’.

•Crew excavated test hole #9E, which revealed the south side of an electrical duct bank.

•Crew excavated test hole #9F which revealed the eastern wall of a Con Edison electrical vault.

Clive · Answer

Hi again,

That seems fine to me now.

which revealed a 4” cast iron duct found to be at a depth of 3.125’. I wonder if the phrase 'found to be' is unnecessary, here and elsewhere?

Best wishes, Clive

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