Please help assess my academic task 2 reponse.

Here's the question:

Some believe museums should entertain people while others believe their purpose is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Here's my response as a discussion essay.

Cultural sites are common not only for local visitors but also tourists to come. There is a debate among people of whom a number argue that exhibitions of antiques in the sites should be entertaining; whilst, some are biased in the idea supporting their educational features. Both of the views will be analyzed in this essay, followed by a well thought out conclusion.

Let's begin by looking at the view which promotes museums' amusing functions. In fact, visitors and toursits first come to displays of artifacts for pleasure. Most of them asked revealed the truth that their visit to the sites was mostly for fun. Usually, the visit was simply included in their holiday trip. Thus, exhibitions of museums already have their entertaining nature.

Turning to the other side of the argument, displays in museums must focus on education, and actually they do. A recent survey into the roles of museums toward educating people, especially young children, has explicitly shown that each year most of school children visited historical sites as an extra-curricular activity to get to know more about the country's or the local history. This is a clear proof which points out the educational functions of museums.

In summary, museums naturally play vital roles in both entertainment and education. To my point of view, it functions equally in both sections. Also, I would recommend further improvement for the sites in order to attract more visitors as this is an effective way to maintain the status of them and the important parts they play in human society.