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Anonymous Posted 6 years ago
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...when suddenly the noise of something crashing down sounds from the shed. Nick walks over and just as he opens the door to the shed, a cat jumps out. Nick looks into the shed. It's crammed with junk.
Is the highlighted part phrased okay and does it fit to the context where it's a shed crammed with junk?
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anonymous highlighted part I would tighten that up a bit. It's somewhat contradictory to use a long phrase to describe a sudden event. when suddenly a crash comes from the shed.
- anonymous highlighted part I would tighten that up a bit.
- It's somewhat contradictory to use a long phrase to describe a sudden event.
- when suddenly a crash comes from the shed.
- anonymous does it fit to the context where it's a shed crammed with junk?
- Yes.
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anonymoushighlighted part
I would tighten that up a bit. It's somewhat contradictory to use a long phrase to describe a sudden event.
... when suddenly a crash comes from the shed.
anonymousdoes it fit to the context where it's a shed crammed with junk?
Yes.
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