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Anonymous Posted 14 years ago
Song Writing & Lyrics

Please help

I wrote a lyric in English! so I need, some one read it and correct my wrong phrases or words.

Thanks in advance

I was on my own
She gave me a crown
I was stupid blind
That I couldn’t see her kind
We were quite opposite
But I love her indeed
She was at the high
I was really shy
She was sporty, I wasn’t
She was on time, I was late
SHE IS HOLY, SPECIALLY. SHE WENT BY A BREEZE
AND THESE DAYS I DON’T KNOW WHERE SHE IS
I was very lazy, she was tidy
I liked being alone and she liked party
SHE IS HOLY, SPECIALLY. SHE WENT BY A BREEZE
AND THESE DAYS I DON’T KNOW WHERE SHE IS
I used to be sad
I used to be bad
I used to be a monster!
But now I’m a lover!
SHE IS HOLY, SPECIALLY. SHE WENT BY A BREEZE
AND THESE DAYS I DON’T KNOW WHERE SHE IS
  

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I was on my own She gave me a crown I was stupid blind Not to see she's kind We were quite opposite But I love her indeed She was from on high I was really shy She was sporty, I wasn’t She was on time, I was late SHE IS HOLY, SPECIALLY. SHE WENT like A BREEZE AND THESE DAYS I DON’T KNOW WHERE SHE IS I was very lazy, she was tidy I liked being alone and she liked to party SHE IS HOLY, SPECIALLY. SHE WENT like A BREEZE AND THESE DAYS I DON’T KNOW WHERE SHE IS I used to be sad I used to be bad I used to be a monster!

— Mister Micawber

  • I was on my own She gave me a crown I was stupid blind Not to see she's kind We were quite opposite But I love her indeed She was from on high I was really shy She was sporty, I wasn’t She was on time, I was late SHE IS HOLY, SPECIALLY.
  • SHE WENT like A BREEZE AND THESE DAYS I DON’T KNOW WHERE SHE IS I was very lazy, she was tidy I liked being alone and she liked to party SHE IS HOLY, SPECIALLY.
  • SHE WENT like A BREEZE AND THESE DAYS I DON’T KNOW WHERE SHE IS I used to be sad I used to be bad I used to be a monster!
  • But now I’m a lover!
  • SHE IS HOLY, SPECIALLY.
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I was on my own
She gave me a crown
I was stupid blind
Not to see she's kind
We were quite opposite
But I love her indeed
She was from on high
I was really shy
She was sporty, I wasn’t
She was on time, I was late
SHE IS HOLY, SPECIALLY. SHE WENT like A BREEZE
AND THESE DAYS I DON’T KNOW WHERE SHE IS
I was very lazy, she was tidy
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Hi!
Thanks for your correction!
Emotion: rose
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Excuse me! one question :
Has it a literary concept? It means, is it good or weak or awful?

Thanks again!
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You called it a 'lyric', by which I thought you meant a song. As a song, it is fine.
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Thanks. But can you tell me difference between lyric and song?
I thought they are the same!
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No, they are related but not the same;

http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/lyric?s=t

Lryics (usually plural) is the words to one or more songs. Lyrics can be set to different music.

A song includes the musical score and the lyrics.
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