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Anonymous Posted 14 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
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Hello,
I am making an english version of my portfolio. I run the text through an online grammar checker, but if you could just please check if everything is ok, I would be very grateful.
" The calendar is designed for a croatian company called Dok-ing, registered for the production of robots and special purposes equipment. This company is one of the international leaders in production of machines for landmine clearance and together with its sister company, Dok-ing demining, is the largest commercial, humanitarian, demining company in South Eastern Europe. First version of the calendar was made for the year 2011 and the second for 2009.
Car on this render was designed for an East Eeurope car design competition called Autor. I put it in my portfolio as an example of rendering and modeling skills.
Next six pages contain three photos i took with my analog camera, Nikon f 60. Original version of the photo is followed by the retouched one.
Next three pages contain layout examples. The text in the layout is without real meaning. Pictures I inserted are photo retouching examples i did on my own photos. They where took with an analog camera Nikon f 60, scanned and after that retouched.
This is a redesign of an old Board game ‘Man, don’t get angry’ which was often played in croatian families. It is made for a research which targeted single people over 30 years old who gathered every friday in a pub called Ducan. "
Thank you ver much for your help!
Sincerely,
Sandra
I am making an english version of my portfolio. I run the text through an online grammar checker, but if you could just please check if everything is ok, I would be very grateful.
" The calendar is designed for a croatian company called Dok-ing, registered for the production of robots and special purposes equipment. This company is one of the international leaders in production of machines for landmine clearance and together with its sister company, Dok-ing demining, is the largest commercial, humanitarian, demining company in South Eastern Europe. First version of the calendar was made for the year 2011 and the second for 2009.
Car on this render was designed for an East Eeurope car design competition called Autor. I put it in my portfolio as an example of rendering and modeling skills.
Next six pages contain three photos i took with my analog camera, Nikon f 60. Original version of the photo is followed by the retouched one.
Next three pages contain layout examples. The text in the layout is without real meaning. Pictures I inserted are photo retouching examples i did on my own photos. They where took with an analog camera Nikon f 60, scanned and after that retouched.
This is a redesign of an old Board game ‘Man, don’t get angry’ which was often played in croatian families. It is made for a research which targeted single people over 30 years old who gathered every friday in a pub called Ducan. "
Thank you ver much for your help!
Sincerely,
Sandra
Top answer
Hello, Sandra. I have underlined some problem areas. Please fix them and post your revised version.
- Hello, Sandra.
- I have underlined some problem areas.
- Please fix them and post your revised version.
- " The calendar is designed for a croatian company called Dok-ing, registered for the production of robots and special purposes equipment.
- This company is one of the international leaders in production of machines for landmine clearan ce an d together with its sister company, Dok-ing demining , is the largest commercial, humanitarian, demining company in South Eastern Europe.
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Hello, Sandra. I have underlined some problem areas. Please fix them and post your revised version.
" The calendar is designed for a croatian company called Dok-ing, registered for the production of robots and special purposes equipment. This company is one of the international leaders in production of machines for landmine clearance and together with its sis
" The calendar is designed for a croatian company called Dok-ing, registered for the production of robots and special purposes equipment. This company is one of the international leaders in production of machines for landmine clearance and together with its sis
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" The calendar is designed for a Croatian company called Dok-ing, registered for the production of robots and special purpose equipment. This company is one of the international leaders in production of machines for landmine clearance, and together with its sister company, Dok-ing Demining, is the largest commercial, humanitarian, demining company in South East Europe. First version of the calenda
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Much better, Sandra!
The calendar is designed for a Croatian company called Dok-ing, registered for the production of robots and special purpose equipment. This company is one of the international leaders in production of machines for landmine clearance, and together with its sister company, Dok-ing Demining, is the largest commercial, humanitarian, demining company in southeast
The calendar is designed for a Croatian company called Dok-ing, registered for the production of robots and special purpose equipment. This company is one of the international leaders in production of machines for landmine clearance, and together with its sister company, Dok-ing Demining, is the largest commercial, humanitarian, demining company in southeast
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