Please help!

How does this sound?

"The ones standing in the back shoved their way to the front, causing a breast-feeding mother to fall on her ****, hugging her infant tightly."

H,

"The ones standing in the back shoved their way to the front, sending a woman carrying an infant to fall on her butt."

It sounds OK.

Please note that some people don't consider '****' a polite word.

Best wishes, Clive

Fashion101How does this sound?

"The ones standing in the back shoved their way to the front, causing a breast-feeding mother to fall on her ****, hugging her infant tightly."

It's fine. I prefer not to use 'ones', as I do not like to make 'one' plural. I suggest 'those' or 'those people'. Personal choice, is all.

What makes you think the woman was breast-feeding? The original version just says "carrying an infant." Believe me, there's a difference!

Clive
H,

Please note that some people don't consider '****' a polite word.

But (no pun intended) it's better than A-$ $.

KhoffWhat makes you think the woman was breast-feeding? The original version just says "carrying an infant." Believe me, there's a difference!

Sorry I posted both posts. I first did it without logging in and didn't think that it went through so I then logged in and re-posted, adding "the breast-feeding" stuff.

Hi,

I see '****' as an Americanism. Don't let's forget the British '***'.

Clive

CliveHi,

I see '****' as an Americanism. Don't let's forget the British '***'.

Clive

"Don't let's forget" is British for "Let's not forget"? Really?!?!?