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Shasam Posted 21 years ago
Grammar

Please help!!!!

I have already corrected the following passage and yet i find errors which i cannot correct can someone please help!!!!

I arrived at Bath yesterday.There is a college in this town where i'll syudy English for two weeks.When we arrived at the college we went to our bedroom.I stay in bed-room with my best friend and I'm very happy for this.

At eight o'clock we had dinner and then we have visited the college.It is beautiful and there is also a swimming pool.Then we came back to our bedroom where I chatted with my friend for a long time.We both happy and we both hope to have a good time at the college.Unfortunately, the weather isn't very good yesterday rained and today too but i think that the weather isn't very important.

Thanks.
  

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When { we} arrived at the college we went to our bedroom. I stayed in my best friend's bedroom and I'm very happy for this. Then we came back to our bedroom where I chatted with my friend for a long time.

  • When { we} arrived at the college we went to our bedroom.
  • I stayed in my best friend's bedroom and I'm very happy for this.
  • Then we came back to our bedroom where I chatted with my friend for a long time.
  • (next paragraph) We are both happy and (delete we both) hope to have a good time at the college.
  • Unfortunately, the weather isn't very good.
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Hi Shasam,

Here's my version of your essay:

I arrived at Bath yesterday.There is a college in this town where I'll be studying English for two weeks.When {we}arrived at the college we went to our bedroom.I stayed in my best friend's bedroom and I'm very happy for this.

At eight o'clock
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I'll give it a try too Emotion: smile

I arrived in Bath yesterday.There is a college in this town where
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ShasamAt eight o'clock we had dinner and then we have visited the college.

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