Please have a look at my letter of Motivation

Hello everybody,

I am going to apply for semester abroad for an american Uni. I already finished my letter, but I am not sure about a certain passage. Would you please have a look at this part of my letter of motivation and tell me your opinion. I am not sure if it's too much to put in a letter of motivation....

My strong academic commitment is complemented by advanced skills in organization and communication as well as my intercultural competence. After graduating from high school, I went to Australia for a self-organized Work&Travel trip. It was one of the most formative years of my life. Besides the fact that I learned how to live completely on my own in a foreign country, I met people from all over the world experiencing their various values and lifestyles. That is what aroused my curiosity of exploring the world and learning more about the different cultures of mankind. My time in Australia helped me become an open-minded person who attaches particular importance to unconventional thinking as well as tolerance and respect.




Due to my increased interest in foreign cultures I am now working voluntarily as a ‘Buddy’ for the ‘BeBuddy-organization’. It is a project led by the International Office determined to support and integrate foreign students into their studies at XXX and their daily life in XXX. At the moment, I am responsible for a student from Syria and I give my best to show him as much hospitality as I received in Australia during my Work&Travel trip. After a few months I am glad to find him well integrated and I am happy to have found another good friend.

Thanks.