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Anonymous Posted 12 years ago
Grammar
Please, grammar check!
Hello!
Could you please check the grammat in this sentence (commas, articles etc.)! I would truly appreciate your help!
On 8th of September 2014 the Ministry of Justice received your submission requesting to contact the relatives of the resident of the Republic of Ireland, Mike XXXX, and to inform them that Mike XXXX consistently provides Dutch authorities and supervising institutions with the home address of the submitter in the Hague (Holland) as his own permanent address, and all the correspondence regarding offences of Mike XXXX is being sent to the aforementioned address.
Thank you a lot!
Could you please check the grammat in this sentence (commas, articles etc.)! I would truly appreciate your help!
On 8th of September 2014 the Ministry of Justice received your submission requesting to contact the relatives of the resident of the Republic of Ireland, Mike XXXX, and to inform them that Mike XXXX consistently provides Dutch authorities and supervising institutions with the home address of the submitter in the Hague (Holland) as his own permanent address, and all the correspondence regarding offences of Mike XXXX is being sent to the aforementioned address.
Thank you a lot!
Top answer
I don't clearly understand this. You are trying to cram too much information into one terrible sentence. You need to divide it into two or three or four sentences.
- I don't clearly understand this.
- You are trying to cram too much information into one terrible sentence.
- You need to divide it into two or three or four sentences.
- Want to try again?
- Clive
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I don't clearly understand this.
You are trying to cram too much information into one terrible sentence. You need to divide it into two or three or four sentences.
Want to try again?
Clive
You are trying to cram too much information into one terrible sentence. You need to divide it into two or three or four sentences.
Want to try again?
Clive
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The sentence is way too long. I'd suggest for readability that you simplify it.
On the 8th of September 2014, the Ministry of Justice received yoursubmission requesting to contact the relatives of the resident of the Republic of Ireland, Mike XXXX, and to inform them that Mike XXXX consistently provides the Dutch authorities and
On the 8th of September 2014, the Ministry of Justice received your
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AlpheccaStars, you helped me so wonderfully with my previous sentence, could I bother you with another one? If you have a little time, please take a look at this sentence and let me know whether there are any improvements necessary.
The Ministry of Justice has evaluated your submission within its competen
The Ministry of Justice has evaluated your submission within its competen
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The Ministry of Justice has evaluated your submission, and has come to two conclusions. First, that because the offenses have been committed in other countries, they are outside the Ministry's jurisdiction and the Ministry can take no action. Second, because the Ministry has no information regarding Mike ***'s relatives and they are apparently neither citizens nor residents of ***, the Ministry ca
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