Please grade my Task 2 Ielts

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Children education are really important because the lessons that they learned today will form the future that they build tomorrow. Cooperation or competition are two kinds of education have been debating over a long time. The argument from both sides will be analyzed from my point of view. Competition has a system of rivalry that booth up the motivation of children. The adult usually compares children with another in order to push the youths to do their best. Moreover, when a higher aim was set in the classroom, the students normally work harder to overpass another. Furthermore, competition prepares young fellows for the social life where they match up with another in their career path. On the other hand, cooperation undoubtedly is an essential part of success in many areas of life. Such as sports teams or companies, too much completion and poor teamwork usually lead to failures. Teammates also point out mistakes and solutions for the problems of their partner and everyone work for a shared aim. In addition, our everyday life depends on the ability to get on well and communicate with another. In conclusion, both of view have their own arguments and advantages. However, after analyzing the history, my personal point of view is that competitions have led to conflicts more than beneficial and the worst situation can lead to wars. For example, the arms race between Russia and American after Second World War lead to the “The Cold War” which damages the economy on both sides. So, Cooperation and growing together will have been more effective for a better future.