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University education shoud be restricted to the very best academic students, rather than being available to a large proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

People have different views about whether tertiary education should be finited to students with good academic performance, rather than being available to a large percentages of adolescents. I strongly disagree with this statement of limiting pupils in university education.

First, the main reason why I do not believe the statement that limiting the quatity of students enrolling in tertiary education is because on an individual level, everyone deserved an equal chance to attend to class in university. Firstly, people are likely to realize their full potential of students in any circumstances. The typical examples of this is that pupils in underprivileged families have a chance to receive free education from states to follow academic education. Additionally, it allows them to climb a career ladder to be out of their depth and apply the theory knowledge in practical life and thus reach a better standard of living, which eliminate inferiority complex and bridge the gap between rich and poor.

Another reason why I do not support with this notion is due to the fact that governments should offer cutting-edge amenities in university to broaden many fields for students to develop talent pool in a variety of majors such as cooking or design, fashion and so on to adapt a rapidly changing workplace. From a social perspective, customer services are becoming increasingly widespread in market, this is considered as a top priority in digital age. Therefore, providing modern facilities to create a creative environment for students to enhance their competence as well as exceed peers to follow a successful career. Moreover, practicing hands-on skills helps students find a well-paid jobs and more inexperienced than pupils with good academic performances.

To sum up, I deeply believe that people should expand the chance of students attending to university instead of limiting to pupils with outstanding academic performance.