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Task 1:

The charts below show information about water consumption in Australia in 2004 and how residential water was consumed in the same year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

HERE'S MY WRITING:

The pie chart given compares the proportion of water usage in 6 sections: houses, apartments, business, government, industry and other; and the bar graph describes the percentage of water used in residential areas for 5 different purposes: bathroom, toilet, clothes, clothes washing, kitchen and garden. All data were taken in Australia in 2004. In general, the largest amount of water was used by the residents. Meanwhile, bathrooms accounted for the biggest usage among accommodations.

With the highest percentage of 57%, water used in houses was then followed by that of apartments, 13%. The water usage of business and industry were nearly the same, at 10% and 11% respectively. In contrast, the volume of water used for other purposes took only a mere 3% of the all categories, which was a half of the government’s usage.

People in Australia spent the largest amount of water for bathrooms(26%), while the highest proportion belonged to gardens in this country(24%). 15% of housing water was used for toilets. In addition, there was 20% of water used for washing clothes, which was double that of kitchens.

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