PLEASE GIVE ME SOME COMMENTS ON MY ESSAY.

Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate.
Which do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

It is assumed that traditional schools should be replaced with more entertaining ones while some people believe that they ought to maintain their educational purpose only. I approve of the first option since this change would deliver many benefits to the students.

Students, especially young ones, usually have a preference for funfilled lessons, enlivening the atmosphere in the class. It is undeniable that they regularly confront many pressures at schools by virtue of grading, ranking and expectations from other people; therefore, it is necessary that they experience an enjoyable time at school to minimize it. With a joyful teaching method, teachers may prevent negative feelings among students inside classes, which are caused by those stresses and strains. Provided that school is more entertaining, students will be encouraged to attend classes and consequently improve their academic performance.

Furthermore, a joyful atmosphere possibly provides teachers the essential motivation to do their best in instilling knowledge in students. Notwithstanding the fact that schools are established to educate, it is probably better if they create suitable study environments for both teachers and learners to achieve the best of each lesson. Learning subjects in which students are forced to remember a large amount of information such as history and geography would be tedious without entertaining activities, especially educative games. They will help students not only to study in a comfortable space but also to study efficiently due to their increasing engagement in such activities.

In conclusion, despite their educational purpose, I agree that schools should be more entertaining for the potential advantages that it brings to students.