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Bamboo And Lotus Posted 20 years ago
Letter Writing
Please give me some advice.Is my covering letter too bad?
Hi everyone
Three days ago I read about volunteer recruitment of an organization. The deadline to email application form is before 5th October. I sent them an email at 9 pm the day before yesterday( 4th October). And Today I received their reply:' Unfortunately , by the time we received your email we have chosen enough volunteers' I really wonder if their reply is true since i sent the email too late or it is just a way to refuse politely. Is my covering letter too bad? Please give me some advice so that I could write better on another occasions. Thank you very much
Dear Sir or Madam
I have heard about volunteer recruitment organized by... on... and I think my background and your requirement make a good match.
I am a sociable person who love communicating as well as working with other people. Last year, I served as a volunteer in ... young volunteer club, taking care of street children. In university I have been a vice monitor and taken part in many activities: writing newspapers, joining English club, for instance. My English is good, especially speaking, listening, and reading skills. I have taken TOEFL exams and received total score ... and TWE score ....
In my opinion, this activity is a great occasion for ... people to gain more knowledge of ... educational system and English tests. It is an effective way for students who want to study abroad and their parents to contact with the representatives of American universities and colleges and decide which school is the most suitable for them. Being recruited as a volunteer is a chance for me not only to improve my English skills but also to apply my English to real life and help other people. Moreover, I think I would get some more information about scholarships for international students to study in .... via this event. I am a fourth-year student and I am searching for a scholarship to study a postgraduate course in ....after finishing my final year at university.
Thank you for your time and consideration. I am pleased to have an interview at anytime convenient for you. I am looking forward to meeting you in the near future.
Yours sincerely"
Three days ago I read about volunteer recruitment of an organization. The deadline to email application form is before 5th October. I sent them an email at 9 pm the day before yesterday( 4th October). And Today I received their reply:' Unfortunately , by the time we received your email we have chosen enough volunteers' I really wonder if their reply is true since i sent the email too late or it is just a way to refuse politely. Is my covering letter too bad? Please give me some advice so that I could write better on another occasions. Thank you very much
Dear Sir or Madam
I have heard about volunteer recruitment organized by... on... and I think my background and your requirement make a good match.
I am a sociable person who love communicating as well as working with other people. Last year, I served as a volunteer in ... young volunteer club, taking care of street children. In university I have been a vice monitor and taken part in many activities: writing newspapers, joining English club, for instance. My English is good, especially speaking, listening, and reading skills. I have taken TOEFL exams and received total score ... and TWE score ....
In my opinion, this activity is a great occasion for ... people to gain more knowledge of ... educational system and English tests. It is an effective way for students who want to study abroad and their parents to contact with the representatives of American universities and colleges and decide which school is the most suitable for them. Being recruited as a volunteer is a chance for me not only to improve my English skills but also to apply my English to real life and help other people. Moreover, I think I would get some more information about scholarships for international students to study in .... via this event. I am a fourth-year student and I am searching for a scholarship to study a postgraduate course in ....after finishing my final year at university.
Thank you for your time and consideration. I am pleased to have an interview at anytime convenient for you. I am looking forward to meeting you in the near future.
Yours sincerely"
Top answer
Hello Michelia, and welcome to English Forums. Your cover letter (though it has a few minor errors) is fine; it is straightforward and sincere, and is more attractive than most I have read. I am sure that they really had already filled their volunteer quota.
- Hello Michelia, and welcome to English Forums.
- Your cover letter (though it has a few minor errors) is fine; it is straightforward and sincere, and is more attractive than most I have read.
- I am sure that they really had already filled their volunteer quota.
- When you apply for a future interview, feel free to post your cover letter here well beforehand, and we will check it for mistakes.
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Hello Michelia, and welcome to English Forums.
Your cover letter (though it has a few minor errors) is fine; it is straightforward and sincere, and is more attractive than most I have read. I am sure that they really had already filled their volunteer quota. When you apply for a future interview, feel free to post your cover letter here well beforehand, and we will check it for mistakes
Your cover letter (though it has a few minor errors) is fine; it is straightforward and sincere, and is more attractive than most I have read. I am sure that they really had already filled their volunteer quota. When you apply for a future interview, feel free to post your cover letter here well beforehand, and we will check it for mistakes
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Dear Mr Micawber
Thank you very much for your good comment. Could you please point out my mistakes since I really want to write better next time.
Thank you very much for your good comment. Could you please point out my mistakes since I really want to write better next time.
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As I said, only a few minor errors:
Dear Sir or Madam:
I have heard about volunteer recruitment organized by... on... and I think my background and your requirements make a good match.
I am a sociable person who loves communicating as well as working with other people. Last year, I served as a
Dear Sir or Madam:
I have heard about volunteer recruitment organized by... on... and I think my background and your requirements make a good match.
I am a sociable person who loves communicating as well as working with other people. Last year, I served as a
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