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Ppff111 Posted 14 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Please give me feedback on my SAT essay
Can someone grade on a scale of 1-6. and give some feedback on my essay, especially since I think it's weakly written. For some reason, I had trouble coming up with examples, so I spent a huge chunk of my time thinking, and I was rushed to write this in the last 10 minutes.
Topic-Do you believe fantasy or imagination is more important than knowledge?
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Fantasy and imagination propels us forward. Knowledge by itself can never move forward, and will forever remain the way it is. It was these that gave them the initial idea, the initial motivation and push to create the technology we have today.
The Wright Brothers are two of the most important inventors in history. They revolutionized humanity forever with the invention of manned power, heavier than air flight. Their journey to this success, however, can't be solely relied upon with their knowledge on physics and whatever else is needed to sustain flight. Ever since the Wright Brothers were little, they played with a miniature gliding toy. They also heard news of successful gliders and their pilots such as Otto Lilienthal. Seeing these gliders gave the Wirght Brothers the fantasy of achieving controlled flight. While many at the time thought the idea was ridiculous, the Wright Brothers dreamed of being able to have sustained, controlled flight. Their dream of this seemingly mythical flying machine propelled them to experiment constantly, using the knowledge to design experimental aircraft. After about 2 years of trial and error, the motivation of their imagination succeeded in building their fantasy of heavier than air flight.
The ingenuity of the Wright Brothers proved that fantasy and imagination helps to innovate while knowledge by itself cannot advance into the unknown.
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Again, I know this is pretty weak, at least in my opinion. If anyone can give me tips on how to formulate strong examples within the 25 minute timeframe of the SAT essay, I'd great appreciate it.
Topic-Do you believe fantasy or imagination is more important than knowledge?
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Fantasy and imagination propels us forward. Knowledge by itself can never move forward, and will forever remain the way it is. It was these that gave them the initial idea, the initial motivation and push to create the technology we have today.
The Wright Brothers are two of the most important inventors in history. They revolutionized humanity forever with the invention of manned power, heavier than air flight. Their journey to this success, however, can't be solely relied upon with their knowledge on physics and whatever else is needed to sustain flight. Ever since the Wright Brothers were little, they played with a miniature gliding toy. They also heard news of successful gliders and their pilots such as Otto Lilienthal. Seeing these gliders gave the Wirght Brothers the fantasy of achieving controlled flight. While many at the time thought the idea was ridiculous, the Wright Brothers dreamed of being able to have sustained, controlled flight. Their dream of this seemingly mythical flying machine propelled them to experiment constantly, using the knowledge to design experimental aircraft. After about 2 years of trial and error, the motivation of their imagination succeeded in building their fantasy of heavier than air flight.
The ingenuity of the Wright Brothers proved that fantasy and imagination helps to innovate while knowledge by itself cannot advance into the unknown.
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Again, I know this is pretty weak, at least in my opinion. If anyone can give me tips on how to formulate strong examples within the 25 minute timeframe of the SAT essay, I'd great appreciate it.
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