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This is my writing task 1 I wrote (Cambridge 12)

The given diagram illustrates the eating habit of Americans in fast food restaurants over the course of 10 years starting in 2003

Overall, as is presented as a result of the survey throughout the period shown, the number of people eating fast food in restaurants once a week or once or twice a month accounted the highest proportion while the figure for citizens using this kind of food every day took the lowest percent.

In 2003, a number of civilians who took by roughly 32%, went to the jungle food restaurants once a week whilst people using fast food every day accounted for under 5%

In 2006, it experienced a slight increase in the proportion of Americans eating fast food once a week, at 33%, followed by once or twice a month with 25%. However, it could be seen a decline in the percentage of people using fast food every day and never at 3% and 4% in respectively.

As is observed, the figure for people coming into fast food restaurant was 34%, leading the trend of fast food consuming.

==> All above is what I can think and write down in the paper, but I don't know whether it is true or false

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