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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, in the 4.0 era, people are doing many occupations to earn money, so there are plenty of classifications of salary. In such countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country. Though, others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. In my opinion, there was no restriction for how much money people can earn.

Better salaries, better development for countries, why not? We are living in the era of social media, wifi 5G, renewable energy resources,... very flourish. Thus, people should encourage each other to earn the best money as they can do most. Also, with high salaries, people could do sharing, do charities, fund for the orphanages. There are lots of thing that money can do well.

However, in the view that some people think about the certain level of salaries, we should get rid of that thought. How could they think about an idea like that, probably they were jealous about others' high salaries. In fact, who just earn slightly money could be afraid of many things, not except the ability that others can earn much money and look down them. Thus, they made up that well-paid people had done various bad things to achieve that. Nevertheless, it is just a very small proportion. They should think clearly and do their best to catch up with the seniors.

Last but not least, in terms of the earning salaries, we could see huge advantages of money can give to us. Good money for better development of country, let's make efforts in order for our lives particularly and our society generally.