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Topic:

Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Dangerous accidents in sports is impossible to get rid of. But we can avoid it by careful preparation and good experience. Throughout the years, people has created many sports but also had lots of arguement about the safety. For example, it is narrated that extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very detrimental and they should be banned. To what extent, I don't agree with this view.

First and foremost, we need to discuss about the injurious circumstances that can happend. The skiing is risk because the high speed and obstacles could appear every where on the way. People could easily fall if they weren't careful, or unfortunately, could lead to serious body damages. These situation are also similar to the sky diving and others.

However, we should look at the positivie sides. Apparently, all those extreme sports are always being supervised strictly. The probation must be rigid everytime and there are evenly lots of premise protocols required to participate in. Organizers always acknowledged about all bad troubles and confined them in many ways. Futhermore, they always anticipate every worst situation can happend. For instance, if there were any obstacles on the skiing way, they would have eradicated them before giving permission to ski. Another, in terms of sky diving, they would have to train the players or perfomers for long time before doing that. In addition, the ambulances and medical teams are always force to be there when something bad occurs.

Thereby, we are able to aware of the accidents and bad things we can make it at least. Thus, don't be afraid of the extreme sports, they aren't dangerous like people think. Clearly, those sports can give the players the most fanstatic experiences.