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Marold Posted 13 years ago
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Lance Armstrong, an American former professional road racing cyclist, who had managed to win the Tour de France seven times consecutively, admitted on Friday to doping, which came as a crippling blow not only to his staunch supporters who believed in him, but also to the whole world of cycling whose reputation is already severely tarnished.
It wasn't until Friday in the chat show broadcast that Lance Armstrong was interviewed by Oprah Winfrey where he confessed in front of a worldwide television audience that he used doping throughout his career from 1999 to 2005. What he said was that he considers the entire situation to be one big lie which was repeated numerous times as he denied continuously every accusations of doping made against him until now. He also claimed that it had been just up to him to decide what to do and therefore, he takes responsibility for the mistakes he had made and he also tries to convey his apologies. However, the assertion that it was "sport's biggest doping programme that has ever happened“ he simply refutes.
During the interview, Lance admitted to these following points. Firstly, he said that he took performance-enhancing drugs in each of his Tour wins from 1999-2005. Then he mentioned that doping was "part of the process required to win the Tour" and he did not feel he was cheating at the time and viewed it as a "level playing field". He he did not fear getting caught and "all the fault and blame" should lie with him. Then, he carried on stating that he was a bully who "turned on" people he did not like and that his cancer fight in the mid-1990s gave him a "win-at-all costs" attitude. Last, but not the least, he also indicated that he is now disposed to co-operate with the US Anti-Doping Agency (Usada).
The drugs he used were especially EPO, which increases endurance. He also used testosterone supplements which is the male hormone acting like steroids and both stimulating muscle growth and allowing people to train harder and to recover more quickly. Cortisone, which is a substance very similar to steroids, helped his body to reduce pain and human growth hormone, which allows you to train harder and more often.
In addition to his confession and apologies, he sees the anger and betrayal in people who believed in him, particularly the bitter disappointment among the people with cancer since he founded an organisation aiming at helping people fight with cancer and encouraged them not to give up and additionally, he was their example to whom they looked up.
Critics and the president of he US Anti-Doping Agency demand that if he is serious about redemption, he will go before an appropriate tribunal, give evidence under oath, subject himself to cross-examination, name names, say who in was helping him cheat and who supplied the drugs.
Currently, he is also faced with a lot of charges from a few companies which demand a refund of money which they gave him owing to his wins.
It wasn't until Friday in the chat show broadcast that Lance Armstrong was interviewed by Oprah Winfrey where he confessed in front of a worldwide television audience that he used doping throughout his career from 1999 to 2005. What he said was that he considers the entire situation to be one big lie which was repeated numerous times as he denied continuously every accusations of doping made against him until now. He also claimed that it had been just up to him to decide what to do and therefore, he takes responsibility for the mistakes he had made and he also tries to convey his apologies. However, the assertion that it was "sport's biggest doping programme that has ever happened“ he simply refutes.
During the interview, Lance admitted to these following points. Firstly, he said that he took performance-enhancing drugs in each of his Tour wins from 1999-2005. Then he mentioned that doping was "part of the process required to win the Tour" and he did not feel he was cheating at the time and viewed it as a "level playing field". He he did not fear getting caught and "all the fault and blame" should lie with him. Then, he carried on stating that he was a bully who "turned on" people he did not like and that his cancer fight in the mid-1990s gave him a "win-at-all costs" attitude. Last, but not the least, he also indicated that he is now disposed to co-operate with the US Anti-Doping Agency (Usada).
The drugs he used were especially EPO, which increases endurance. He also used testosterone supplements which is the male hormone acting like steroids and both stimulating muscle growth and allowing people to train harder and to recover more quickly. Cortisone, which is a substance very similar to steroids, helped his body to reduce pain and human growth hormone, which allows you to train harder and more often.
In addition to his confession and apologies, he sees the anger and betrayal in people who believed in him, particularly the bitter disappointment among the people with cancer since he founded an organisation aiming at helping people fight with cancer and encouraged them not to give up and additionally, he was their example to whom they looked up.
Critics and the president of he US Anti-Doping Agency demand that if he is serious about redemption, he will go before an appropriate tribunal, give evidence under oath, subject himself to cross-examination, name names, say who in was helping him cheat and who supplied the drugs.
Currently, he is also faced with a lot of charges from a few companies which demand a refund of money which they gave him owing to his wins.
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Lance Armstrong, an American former professional road racing cyclist , (probably better without the comma there) who had managed to win won the Tour de France seven consecutive times consecutively , admitted on Friday to doping, which doping. This came as a crippling blow not only to his staunch supporters who believed in him (that goes without saying) , but also to the whole world of cycling , (comma here) whose reputation is was already severely tarnished. In the last sentence, you have started in past tense ( came as) and continued with believed , so you should say was severely tarnished, not is .
- Lance Armstrong, an American former professional road racing cyclist , (probably better without the comma there) who had managed to win won the Tour de France seven consecutive times consecutively , admitted on Friday to doping, which doping.
- This came as a crippling blow not only to his staunch supporters who believed in him (that goes without saying) , but also to the whole world of cycling , (comma here) whose reputation is was already severely tarnished.
- In the last sentence, you have started in past tense ( came as) and continued with believed , so you should say was severely tarnished, not is .
- It wasn't until Friday in the chat show broadcast that Lance Armstrong was interviewed by Oprah Winfrey where he confessed in front of a worldwide television audience that he had used doping throughout his career from 1999 to 2005.
- What he said was that He said that he considers the entire situation to be one big lie which was repeated numerous times as he repeatedly denied continuously every the accusations of doping (not needed; can be assumed) made against him until now .
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Lance Armstrong, an American former professional road racing cyclist, (probably better without the comma there) who had managed to win won the Tour de France seven consecutive times consecutively , admitted on Friday to doping, which doping. This came as a crippling blow not only to his staunch supporters who believed in
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I have to express my great gratitude to you for such an amazing correction! Indeed, thank you very much for your time, it helped me a lot!!
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KrisBlueNZThe part before the comma does not match he sees. This is a common mistake. Simplify the language to see it more clearly: "As well as his apologies, he sees anger ...". Logically that can be rearranged as "He sees his apologies and he sees anger ...". You see the problem? He doesn't see his apologies, so they aren't things in addition to anger. He sees the anger
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