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Topic: students in schools and other universities learn far more from teacher than other sources (for example: the internet and TV)

Do you agree or disagree?

At present, various sources have been created for students to enrich their knowledge. Therefore, when it comes to a problem that the sources students learn the most, some agree that students learn more from teachers, while others say no. In my opinion, I totally disagree with that.

Besides benefits we have already known when sudying from teachers, there are some disadvantages we have to consider. For example, financial problem is one of the most fundamental problems students have to deal with. Money for basic needs and the tuition fee are the nightmares to students which make them have to do a part-time job to earn money which affects the grades because of reducing time. Furthermore, people who study in some remote provinces which have a lot of natural disasters may find it hard to go to the schools. For instance, in the Central of Viet Nam, floods occurs every year and lasts for a long time which makes students have to absent from attending lectures. Due to those problems, it is difficult for students to learn from their lecturers.

By contrast, learning from internet or TV has become a trend for the young because of the convenience. They just stay at home and have a computer connecting to the internet then they can learn anything they want relating to their major without meeting teacher. Another thing is the knowledge, there are so much information students can’t find in textbooks, surfing the internet is necessary to enrich these. Learning from TV also helps students absorb more information in an effective way including practical information, images, sounds and it makes learning is no longer a boring burden to students.

In conclusion, although learning from teacher is a traditional way, the internet and TV have myriad benefits to increase studying effciency for students a lot.