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Topic: There have been many inventions in human history (example: the wheel). Some people think the most important thing is the internet.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Throughout the human history,many inventions has been created to improve the living condition of human. Therefore, when it comes to which invention is the most important, internet is considered to be the most imperative one. This essay will give you some reasons why most people say that.

First, the internet marks the third industrial revolution which is also the symbol of the it. In each industrial revolution, the developing rate of the society increase in an amazing rate because of that symbol. It not only increases the productivity of people but also reduces human physical strength. For example, delivering a letter. In the past, people used to go to a post office to send or receive items or postman could did that instead. But since internet was created, people just lie at home and click “send”. If it wasn’t invented, the living condition wouldn’t be as convenient as present.

As a result, when the internet is created, the life is much easier than it used to be. For example, go shopping, to a shopper – holic, it would be a disaster when the mall has a great discount such as seasonal discount, black Friday, if they had to come by themselves. Therefore, using internet is considered to be the best way to avoid that difficulty. Besides, it also saves a lot of time and money. A meeting will be a clear instance. Members just need a computer connecting internet, then they can have a meeting all day long without meeting one another.

In short, the internet has become indispensable to life which makes people’s life become easily.