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The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The pie charts present the percentage of revenue resources and expenditures of a children’s charity in the USA each year. Overall, donated food and program services were the most predominant.

Just over 85% of revenue resources for children’s charity went on donated food, with a 86.6% share. In second place was community contributions providing 10.6% of revenue for charity. Program revenue accounted for 2.2% of the total, when it was in third place. The percentage of investment income and Government grants stood at only 0.2% respectively. Finally, 0.4% of the total went on other income.

At the same time, program services made up the largest proportion of expenditures, dominating the other spending, with 95.8%. Whereas, 2.6% of all the categories was fundraising. On the other hand, only 1.6% of the total which was the smallest proportion of overall expenditures was management and general.

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The pie charts present the percentage of revenue resources (wrong word) and expenditures of a children’s charity in the USA each year. Each year means that there is more than one year.) Overall, donated food and program services were the most predominant.

(Overall, donated food was the largest revenue source and program services the largest expenditure.)

Just over 85% of revenue resources (wrong word) for (missing word) children’s charity went on (wrong word) donated food, with a 86.6% share. (repetitious. You already wrote "just over 85%." Avoid repeating information.) In second place was community contributions providing 10.6% of (missing word) revenue ~~for charity~~. Program revenue accounted for 2.2% of the total, when it was in third place. The percentage of investment income and Government grants stood at only 0.2% respectively. Finally, 0.4% of the total went on other income.

At the same time, program services made up the largest proportion of expenditures, dominating the other spending, with 95.8%. Whereas, 2.6% ~~of all the categories~~ was fundraising. On the other hand, only 1.6% of the total, which was the smallest proportion of overall expenditures, was management and general.

You missed an important point. The total income from all sources was over 53.5 million dollars. The charity did not spend all of its income this year, retaining over 336 thousand dollars.

You should lump the minor contributors together: Income from government grants, investments and other sources were less than 1% of the total.

You should lump the minor expense categories together: Expenses for fundraising and management of the charity were less than 5% of the total expenses. Most of the money went to charitable purposes.

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