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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.The line graph compares the amount of goods transported in the UK by four different modes of transport between 1974 and 2002. These are road, water, rail and pipeline. Units are measured in  million tonnes.Overall, road was the most popular mode of transport, while pineline was used the least. The amount of goods tranported by rail was stable from 1971 to 2002, whereas those of the three remaining ways of tranportation increased.In detail, the value for road increased from 70 million to nearly 80 million in 1994, after which it continually rised to reach its highest level, at about 90 million. There was a slight change for water in the initial four years before an increase to 60 million in 1994, at which point this figure started to fall to around 50 million but suddenly went up to more than 20 million. Rail started out at precisely 40 million but ended up with no change. The two lowest levels were closely 30 million, at 1986 and 1994. In 1974, the amount of goods tranported by pinepine was only about 5 million but rapidly went up to nearly 25 million eight years later and remained stable from that to 1990, this was followed by a fall to 20 million in 1994. In the last eight years, the value for pipeline plateaued.

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The line graph compares the amount of goods transported in the UK by four different modes of transport between 1974 and 2002. These are road, water, rail and pipeline. Units are measured in million tonnes.

Overall, road was the most popular (wrong word) mode of transport, while pineline

Overall, road was the most popular (wrong word) mode of transport, while pineline was used the least. The amount of goods tranported by rail was ~~stable~~ constant from 1971 to 2002, whereas those of the three remaining ways of tranportation increased.

In detail, the value for road increased from 70 million to nearly 80 million in 1994, after which it continually rised to reach its highest level, at about 90 million. There was a slight change for water in the initial four years before an increase to 60 million in 1994, at which point this figure (wrong word) started to fall to around 50 million but suddenly went up to more than 20 million. Rail started out at precisely 40 million but ended up with no change. The two lowest levels were closely 30 million, at 1986 and 1994. In 1974, the amount of goods tranported by pinepine was only about 5 million but rapidly went up to nearly 25 million eight years later and remained constant ~~stable~~ from that to 1990, (comma splice) this was followed by a fall to 20 million in 1994. In the last eight years, the value for pipeline plateaued.

You will not get a high score unless you combine categories, even if you have perfect spelling and grammar.

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Sample essay (a little bit too long, but it will give you some ideas of vocabulary and phrasing.)

I chose to combine the total weight at start and end of the period. Then the relative amounts (percentages or proportions) for each mode of transport could be compared. I also used the abbreviation MT for millions of tonnes, which removed a lot or repetition.

The line graph gives the amount of goods (by weight, in millions of tonnes) conveyed within the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four modes of transport: road, water, rail and pipeline.

Overall, the largest amount of goods were moved over the road system throughout the entire period. Water was clearly in second place after 1978, followed by rail and pipeline. The total weight increased substantially over the period, and that was distributed over all modes except rail which had no change.

In detail, in 1974, 155 million tonnes (MT) were transported, and 45% (70 MT) was by road. Water and rail had equal shares, about 25% each, and pipeline carried the remainder. Roads continued to dominate, but rail and water diverged around 1978, when the amounts moved by water went up and those by rail dropped. Pipeline transport had a broad peak ( around 25 MT) between 1982 and 1990, but then fell to end at about 20 MT in 2002. In 2002, there was a total of 202 MT of goods transported, about 40% more than in 1974. Still about the same percentage (43% or 95 MT) was moved by road, with water being second, at around 30% or 65 MT, followed by rail (18% or 40 MT), and pipeline transporting the remaining 20 MT.

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