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The given chart illustrates the proportion of owning households and renting accommodations in England and Wales from 1918 and 2011.

Overall, households in rented accommodation were by far the highest percentage until 1961 while from 1981 to 2011; households in owned accommodation were the predominant. The maximum proportion in the figure was for rented accommodation in 1918.

In 1918, rented accommodation accounted for 77% of total households while only about 22% were for owned accommodations. The proportion of rented one decreased gradually to just below 60 % in 1961. By contrast, there was a dramatic increase in owned accommodation to reach almost 40% in the same year. In 1971, both types of household had the same percentage (50%).