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Jackson6612 Posted 18 years ago
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Please edit/correct the given body of a application:

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Hi Jackson - I tried to change your text - the problem was a mix of informal / formal speech and active / passive moods That made it hard to read. I could not understand the last 2 sentences. This submission is in regards to the economics class scheduled on 19 th September, 2008 at 1-2 PM.

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  • Hi Jackson - I tried to change your text - the problem was a mix of informal / formal speech and active / passive moods That made it hard to read.
  • I could not understand the last 2 sentences.
  • This submission is in regards to the economics class scheduled on 19 th September, 2008 at 1-2 PM.
  • I conducted this class on the scheduled day from 12 - 1 PM, an hour before its regularly scheduled time.
  • The class schedule was moved forward by one hour due to a special unanimous request of all the students (the attendance roll is attached).
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Hi Jackson - I tried to change your text - the problem was a mix of informal / formal speech and active / passive moods That made it hard to read. I could not understand the last 2 sentences.

This submission is in regards to the economics class scheduled on 19th September, 2008 at 1-2 PM. I conducted this class on the scheduled day from 12 - 1 PM, an hour before its regularl
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Hi Alphecca,

Can you make any sense out of them now?

I understand my professional duties and works my level best to perform them as I am supposed to. I request the relevant authority for pre-correspondance on such issues be made with Director of Sciences in order to avoid misunderstanding in the future. This will save both parties time and this will also help to develop a good p
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If Alphecca is not available then please someone else help me with the given questions. It's urgent. Thanks for the understanding.
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Jackson6612I still have problems understanding what you are saying... Do you want someone (in authority, meaning the leader or manager) in the REC team to correspond first with the Director of Sciences on similar issues in the future?

I understand my professional duties and works my level best (this is very informal!) to perform them as
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Is it clear now?
I request the relevant authority for pre-correspondance (? maybe just correspondence) on such issues be made (? what is being made?) with Director of Sciences in order to avoid misunderstandings in the future. 

New version:

I request the
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Jackson6612I request the relevant authority to correspond first with director of sciences on all such matters. That will avoid future misunderstandings and.....
How about this version
I request the relevant authority to discuss these issues first with director of sciences before initiating any formal correspondence.

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Question:

I think the previous version was ambiguous so I have edited it. Do you find it correct?

I understand my professional duties and works hard to perform them according to the rules and regulations. I would suggest the REC team to correspond first with Director of Basic Sciences Department on all such matters. This will avoid future
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Jackson6612I understand my professional duties and work (agrees with the subject, I. "strive" is a good word too.) works hard to perform them according to the rules and regulations. I would suggest the REC team to correspond first with Director of Basic Sciences Department on all such matters. This will avo
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Alphecca, you are so sweet. Thanks a lot for helping me with all the questions in such a short time.

I wish you good health and many years of happiness.

Regards,

Jackson
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The same to you Jackson!!! All the best
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