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Anonymous Posted 15 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Please critique my poem. Errors?

Perfection




Could perfection be found

Only in the imperfect?

Could perfection be achieved

Only by the imperfect?




A perfect painting

Shows perfect imperfections

But how do we decide

Where the perfect is?




I cannot find it;

Cannot find my perfection

The perfect left me

Or did I leave it?




She is perfect

He is perfect

They are perfect

In my eyes




I am the imperfection

In the perfection

But perfection is

Anything we make it

  

Top answer

Its imperfection is obvious: there are too many perfect/imperfect s. I was bored by the end of the first verse. Have you read any of Knots by RD Laing?

— Mister Micawber

  • Its imperfection is obvious: there are too many perfect/imperfect s.
  • I was bored by the end of the first verse.
  • Have you read any of Knots by RD Laing?
  • “ They are playing a game.
  • They are playing at not playing a game.
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Its imperfection is obvious: there are too many perfect/imperfects. I was bored by the end of the first verse. Have you read any of Knots by RD Laing?

“They are playing a game. They are playing at not
playing a game. If I show them I see they are, I
shall break the rules and they will punish me.
I must play their game, of not seeing, I see the game
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