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Blue J Posted 20 years ago
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0 Today I read the good article "05000". It says that a programmer have to spend about 10 years becoming a great programmer. I can't agree more with this idea. Currently, people want to grasp a programming language within 3 weeks or a month and they also want to become a project manager after two years. People dream to have an overnight success and don't want to spend 10 or 20 years in hard work. They want fast money and strive to become a millionaire within one or two years. Therefore, they choose university majors or jobs that will enable them to earn much money, but don't consider whether they are really interested in them.02br
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00I am a graduate of Computer Science and have worked for two years. Recently some of my previous classmates don't want to work as programmers any more and want to find a job in investing banks. They told me their current jobs as programmers are boring and painful for them. The reason that they chose to study Computer Science then is because IT jobs were well paid at that time. However current IT industry is not good as before and the payment is worse. They heard working in investing bank will be well paid and the bonus is big. Therefore they are considering to change their career and find a position in investing bank.Without passion for their work, I don't think they will feel happy and satisfied in work. Of course, they will not be willing to spend long time in hard work to succeed. Ten years is too long for them. But only painful and demanding practice and long-time hard work can make us achieve greatness. In fact, we need have passion in our work and also a little bit of patience.0230hrefhttp://www.norvig.com/21-days.htmlcTeach Yourself Programming in Ten Years
  

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0 Can anyone help me to edit this essay? thanks.0-
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0 I'm not the better person you'll find for English grammar, maybe I could help you... If I make mistakes, please forgive me. 02br
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00"Recently some of my previous classmates don't want to work as programmers any more and [they] want to find a job in investing banks."02br
00I think it's more elegant.02br
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00"The reason that they chose t
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0 Overall it's really good, any English speaker would be able to understand it. Only a few grammatical points to fix and some akward wording.02br
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00"It says that a programmer have to spend about 10 years becoming a great programmer."02br
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00 "It says that a programmer has to spend about 10 years to become a great programmer."0
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0 Hi, 01b00 Dio's BIOS02b00, 01b00 J111502b00, and 01b00 Feebs1102b00,02br
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00Thank you very much for your helpful feedback. Based on your opinions, I revised my essay ( see the below). 02br
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00To 01b00 Feebs11, 02b00can you explain the reason why you c
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0 Yes - sorry - There are difference types of banking and I was trying to interpret what you meant by "investing banks" - probably should have used "Investment Banks" instead. This link indicates the different kinds of banks there are: 0500230hrefhttp://www.careers.ed.ac.uk/STUDENTS/Careers/J7.html
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0 Yes, you're right. should be "investment bank". thanks.0-

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