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Rikaro Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Please critic on my paragraph. I can't pass my test.
0 I'm suppost to write an essay, but i'll summerize it in a paragraph. I'm trying to pass this test in order to proceed my program, but i'm still struggling and can't get a pass on the test. 02 br
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00 The topic was "Living by yourself is hard. Agree or Disagree?" 02 br
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00 Perhapes one of the most difficult things in life when you grow up, is when you seperate from your family, and living by your own. What a lot of people thinks is that once you're out there all by yourself, you'll be like prisons released from chains. However, when you're all alone, you'll have to take care of yourself. By saying that, it means that all cloths have to be washed, dishes to be cleaned, and endless source of things to complete all by yourself. Despite the fact that you're all free, but only to the matter of having your parents around. Being free isn't the real for it. Alone is the correct vocabulary for it. 02 br
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00 Please critize on what i wrote. I don't even know what's the problem with my writing. I'll post a full essay next time so you guys can help me out more 05 0 00 thanks. 010id 1
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00 The topic was "Living by yourself is hard. Agree or Disagree?" 02 br
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00 Perhapes one of the most difficult things in life when you grow up, is when you seperate from your family, and living by your own. What a lot of people thinks is that once you're out there all by yourself, you'll be like prisons released from chains. However, when you're all alone, you'll have to take care of yourself. By saying that, it means that all cloths have to be washed, dishes to be cleaned, and endless source of things to complete all by yourself. Despite the fact that you're all free, but only to the matter of having your parents around. Being free isn't the real for it. Alone is the correct vocabulary for it. 02 br
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00 Please critize on what i wrote. I don't even know what's the problem with my writing. I'll post a full essay next time so you guys can help me out more 05 0 00 thanks. 010id 1
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0 I've corrected your paragraph for you. 02 br 02 br 00 Perhaps one of the most difficult things in life is when you grow up, seperate from your family, and live on your own. What a lot of people think is that once you're out there all by yourself, you'll be like a prisoner released from chains.
- 0 I've corrected your paragraph for you.
- 02 br 02 br 00 Perhaps one of the most difficult things in life is when you grow up, seperate from your family, and live on your own.
- What a lot of people think is that once you're out there all by yourself, you'll be like a prisoner released from chains.
- However, when you're all alone, you have to take care of yourself.
- All clothes have to be washed, dishes have to be cleaned, and endless things have to be completed all by yourself.
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0 I've corrected your paragraph for you. Verb tenses seem to be your biggest problem, also some of your vocabulary is incorrect (for example prison, cloths). 02 br
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0 wow, thanks for the help. Is there any quick way to improve my verb tenses (i know there's really no short cut in english) but because my next test is coming up really soon. If there's anything that can help me that would be great! 02 br
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