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In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their lifetime. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?

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A long time ago, people always lived in one place from chilhood until old age. Nowadays, together with the development of technology, citizens can move to another place really fast and convinient. So at the present, most people - specially teenagers - spend their time in various areas, travelling around the world. There are many advantages and disadvantages of both: living in one place or moving different places.

In my own view, continuing live in the same place of whole life was the best choice of many people in the past. Actually, stayed in one place had its own benefits. Firstly, it would bring the stability for the habitants. People lived together for a long time, so they were in each other's pockets and they could give their neighbours a helping hand. In addition, people who stayed in single place would have a comfortable and safety lifestyle. They understood their local culture, their neighbours obviously. That is the reason why they could always feel safe and restful.

On the other hand, there were disadvantages as well. They wouldn't have lots of opportunities for jobs or higher education. Secondly, They got stuck in their place, didn't take a trip to new lands so their knowledge would be limited. Last but not least, people probably felt bored to death and it could affect their mood a lot.

Nowadays, people are more mobile. They journey days by days, likely never want to stop. I firmly believe that citizens who travel to new place will get more chances for jobs with high salary or well - qualified education. For example, whenever they move to new country, new city, they will get another job offer. And they can keep on making choices until they find what suit them best. Also, another benefit is that they can learn new culture, new knowledge, try new things...etc and it will expand their horrizons.

Neverthless, there are some risks that we should take notice. Travelling lot can bring tons of financial difficulties. Unless you have a stable income, it will be difficult for you to afford the cost. Another point worth noting is when people take a trip to different lands, they won't uderstand the living environment, so they will be easily scammed.

All things considered, there are advantages and disadvantages of staying in one place and travelling new lands. Personally speaking, I prefer experience different place to just living single place whole my life. Because I love challenging myself to be more mature and independent. Also, I really eager learning more about culture and people in other countries.