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Son James Posted 13 years ago
Grammar
Please correct wrong things in my writing
Please check my writing and if there are wrong things, please correct them. Thank you in advance for your teaching.
When my father was dead, I never cried. I don't know why I didn't cry at that important moment. My mother and two younger brothers cried a lot, never tried to hide their tears as if the ceiling of the patient's room was just falling down.
After sending him, sometimes I've dreamed him and almost of every moment when I take walk to get out from my stuffy reality I have recalled him.
Even though he shouted me that he wanted to live more for his family, as if he finally agreed with his death, Can I agree that I should die some day.
Sometimes I feel that he still lives in my mind continuously since whenever I think of him, he always gives his smile to me.
Up to now some people still miss him a lot. In watching such things,even though he died materially, it seems that he is really spiritually alive and will live in their minds.
I'm not sure whether the sin of not crying for his death leads me to think like this. "He should have lived more!" "A good father is the man who lives long to see his children' growing up".
I could realize that this missing on him can never be a burden any more to people who know and miss him since some time.
Then, maybe the god is teaching us why to agree with our final making us feel how our soul can live.
Thanks,god!
I ask myself what kind of fathers I want to be. I don't know it yet. But as for the death, I want to be like that of my father.
Good night,my father! Don't worry for my tomorrow!
When my father was dead, I never cried. I don't know why I didn't cry at that important moment. My mother and two younger brothers cried a lot, never tried to hide their tears as if the ceiling of the patient's room was just falling down.
After sending him, sometimes I've dreamed him and almost of every moment when I take walk to get out from my stuffy reality I have recalled him.
Even though he shouted me that he wanted to live more for his family, as if he finally agreed with his death, Can I agree that I should die some day.
Sometimes I feel that he still lives in my mind continuously since whenever I think of him, he always gives his smile to me.
Up to now some people still miss him a lot. In watching such things,even though he died materially, it seems that he is really spiritually alive and will live in their minds.
I'm not sure whether the sin of not crying for his death leads me to think like this. "He should have lived more!" "A good father is the man who lives long to see his children' growing up".
I could realize that this missing on him can never be a burden any more to people who know and miss him since some time.
Then, maybe the god is teaching us why to agree with our final making us feel how our soul can live.
Thanks,god!
I ask myself what kind of fathers I want to be. I don't know it yet. But as for the death, I want to be like that of my father.
Good night,my father! Don't worry for my tomorrow!
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Son James, please forgive me if I have rewritten it too much, but I couldn't resist myself. Let me know if I have missed the meaning of anything, Okay? When my father died, I didn't cry.
- Son James, please forgive me if I have rewritten it too much, but I couldn't resist myself.
- Let me know if I have missed the meaning of anything, Okay?
- When my father died, I didn't cry.
- I don't know why I didn't cry at that important moment, because my mother and two younger brothers cried a lot.
- They never tried to hide their tears and it seemed to me as if his hospital room was just falling down around us.
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Son James, please forgive me if I have rewritten it too much, but I couldn't resist myself. Let me know if I have missed the meaning of anything, Okay?
When my father died, I didn't cry. I don't know why I didn't cry at that important moment, because my mother and two younger brothers cried a lot. They never tried to hide their tears and it seemed to me as if his hospital room was just
When my father died, I didn't cry. I don't know why I didn't cry at that important moment, because my mother and two younger brothers cried a lot. They never tried to hide their tears and it seemed to me as if his hospital room was just
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Thank you so much for your correction,Ms Cynthia. Some expressions are really impressed to me.The expression "to escape the stale, never-ending reality of my life" is beautiful. Based on your writing, I want to rewrite it. I want to write it honestly from my heart. If possible,I want to write it emotionally,not logically. You can see it my Facebook. Thank you once again for your teaching and expre
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My dear friend, you bring me so much honor with your words. It was such a special thing that you shared with me that I truly wanted to write it as close to my heart as possible. I am indeed going to look forward to reading your completed version. A kiss to you and your beautiful family.
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