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Anonymous Posted 16 years ago
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Please correct this sentence
Peter wished to leave before the salesperson, who was now starting to look more and more enthusiastic, bothered him with another sales talk.
What I want to know is: while describing Peter's reaction, would it be okay to insert a comma and introduce the salesperson's demeanor as well in this manner?
What I want to know is: while describing Peter's reaction, would it be okay to insert a comma and introduce the salesperson's demeanor as well in this manner?
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Peter wished to leave before the salesperson, who was now starting to look more and more enthusiastic, bothered him with another sales talk. It doesn't work for me. Perhaps a short appositive would work in this case.
- Peter wished to leave before the salesperson, who was now starting to look more and more enthusiastic, bothered him with another sales talk.
- It doesn't work for me.
- Perhaps a short appositive would work in this case.
- Peter wished to leave before the salesperson, a real pain-in-the-****, bothered him with another sales talk.
- Your full-fledged, and rather long relative clause is just too much of an interruption.
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Peter wished to leave before the salesperson, who was now starting to look more and more enthusiastic, bothered him with another sales talk.
It doesn't work for me.
Perhaps a short appositive would work in this case.
Peter wished to leave before the salesperson, a real pain-in-the-****, bothered him with anoth
It doesn't work for me.
Perhaps a short appositive would work in this case.
Peter wished to leave before the salesperson, a real pain-in-the-****, bothered him with anoth
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