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About being at the meeting, it will help me a lot when I have a draft and show to them ask them to put some effort into it. But if a meeting just discusses recruiting more members, I think it’s unnecessary for me to attend. After skimming through the materials, I believe that they have tried to develop an economic development more than 10 years ago. I shouldn’t attend meeting if I don’t have a draft. As soon as I have a draft, I will attend these meetings and discuss with them what my strategies are and if they think it works or suggest or add something in it that will help me a lot. After that we can use this EDS to implement but in the mean while we can interviews and gather data from small businesses and be familiar with lands / streets / vacant around the city / if it near any major high way. After all of these are finished, we should publish on our website with a link name “economic development” and implement and evaluate our strategy proximity every 2 to 3 years. We’ll provide them with all the information that needed for prospective owners or decision makers can see this place is their opportunity.

Malcon · Accepted Answer

About being at the meeting, it will help me a lot when I have a draft and show to them ask them to put some effort into (it will help me so much) when I have a draft and show to them(it will be clearn if you talk about specific people) or ask them putting some effort into it. But if a meeting just discusses recruiting more members, I think it’s unnecessary for me to attend(to pay attention). After skimming through the materials, I believe that they have tried to develop an economic development more than 10 years ago. I shouldn’t attend meeting if I don’t have a draft. As soon as I have a draft, I will attend these meetings and discuss with them what my strategies are ( which they are my strategies)and if they think it works or suggest or add something in it that will help me a lot. After that we can use this EDS to implement but in the mean, while we can interviews and gather data from small businesses and be familiar with lands / streets / vacant around the city / if it near any major high way. After all of these are finished, we should publish on our website with a link name “economic development” and implement and evaluate our strategy proximity every 2 to 3 years. We’ll provide them with all the information that needed(that is needed) for prospective owners or decision makers can see this place is their opportunity( can see this place in their opportunity).

I think your writting in some part is not clear, but the reader will undestand what are you talking about.

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Nona the brit · Answer

When I'm at the meeting, it will help me a lot to have a draft to show to them. (ask them to put some effort into - which they - at the meeting or the people creating the draft?. But if the meeting is just to discuss recruiting more members, I think it’s unnecessary for me to attend. (attend is correct). After skimming through the materials, I believe that they tried to develop an economic development more than 10 years ago. I shouldn’t attend meeting if I don’t have a draft. (do you really mean shouldn't or will not?) As soon as I have a draft, I will attend these meetings and discuss my strategies with them and their comments will help me a lot. After that, we can use this EDS to implement but in the meantime, we can conduct interviews and gather data from small businesses and become familiar with the locations and their proximity to the highway. After all of this has been finished, we should publish the information on our website with a link name “economic development” and implement and evaluate our strategy every 2 to 3 years. We’ll provide them with all the information that is needed for prospective buyers or decision makers and promote this place as an opportunity.

When you talk about 'draft' I'm not sure what you mean. Do you mean an agenda? (a list of what will be discussed at the meeting).

Nancy1982 · Answer

What should I do to improve my writing? I have ideas what to write but my essay is not clear and too wordy?

Thank you for all your help.

Nancy1982 · Answer

After skimming through the DAPS materials, I believe that they tried to develop an Economic Development Strategy more than 10 years ago. I will attend meeting when I have an ED draft in hand and discuss ED strategies with them and ask for their comments, which will be our valuable source for the implementation process. After the EDS is approved, we begin to implement but in the meantime, we can conduct interviews and gather data, advertise, develop a resource page, focus on retail, fill vacant spaces, and nurture current businesses and assist them to expand. After all of this has been finished, we should publish the information on our website with a link name “Economic Development” and begin to implement. We’ll provide prospective buyers or decision makers with all the information that is needed to operate and promote this place as an opportunity. When people see suc song in our city and when developers start looking in Downtown Revitalization Plan; we can start reaching out for heavy industry or high profession jobs. I understand the City wants all of these types of businesses so that we can quickly take off tax burdens on the City. However, Economic Development is a long-term process and takes a lot of time and energy to accomplish. We must constantly modify and revise the EDS because business and economic revolve quickly.

Thank you for all your help.

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