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Chaminda senevirathne Posted 10 years ago
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Marine Environment Protection authority has planned a capacity building programme on Oil Spill Response which is directly related to effective implementation of Oil Spill Contingency Plan of respective agencies which should be formulated by relevant agencies in compliance with National Oil Spill Contingency Plan (NOSCOP).
This program scheduled to be conduct as two parts. The awareness Workshop of this programme will be held on 11th of May 2016 at Galle, and relevant Drill Exercises is planed to be held in Galle Commercial Port at 12th of May 2016.
Above captioned workshop is aimed to (a) Enhance Oil Spill response capacity of first respondents of relevant agencies (b) Ensure that trained officials shall be available for operational activities (c) Ensure the available resources for oil spill combating operation if and when oil spill emergency occurs.
It is certainly a privilege and honor to have your contribution on this occasion on behalf of Marie Environment Protection Authority, may I please request you to
1. Nominate a resource person to deliver a guest lecture on “How to tackle with available resources, when Oil Spill emergencies occurs in Sri Lankan Waters” on 2016/05/27 at Galle.
2. Nominate an operation team with skills and relevant equipment to demonstrate a Drill exercise for the participants at commercial port , Galle
We hope your contribution at this event will make the above mentioned Programme a very successful event. We look forward for your early response in this regard please.
Your cooperation in this regard is greatly appreciated.
This program scheduled to be conduct as two parts. The awareness Workshop of this programme will be held on 11th of May 2016 at Galle, and relevant Drill Exercises is planed to be held in Galle Commercial Port at 12th of May 2016.
Above captioned workshop is aimed to (a) Enhance Oil Spill response capacity of first respondents of relevant agencies (b) Ensure that trained officials shall be available for operational activities (c) Ensure the available resources for oil spill combating operation if and when oil spill emergency occurs.
It is certainly a privilege and honor to have your contribution on this occasion on behalf of Marie Environment Protection Authority, may I please request you to
1. Nominate a resource person to deliver a guest lecture on “How to tackle with available resources, when Oil Spill emergencies occurs in Sri Lankan Waters” on 2016/05/27 at Galle.
2. Nominate an operation team with skills and relevant equipment to demonstrate a Drill exercise for the participants at commercial port , Galle
We hope your contribution at this event will make the above mentioned Programme a very successful event. We look forward for your early response in this regard please.
Your cooperation in this regard is greatly appreciated.
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Chaminda senevirathne Marine Environment Protection authority has planned a capacity building programme on Oil Spill Response which is directly related to effective implementation of Oil Spill Contingency Plan of respective agencies which should be formulated by relevant agencies in compliance with National Oil Spill Contingency Plan (NOSCOP). This sentence suffers from verbosity. Write shorter sentences.
- Chaminda senevirathne Marine Environment Protection authority has planned a capacity building programme on Oil Spill Response which is directly related to effective implementation of Oil Spill Contingency Plan of respective agencies which should be formulated by relevant agencies in compliance with National Oil Spill Contingency Plan (NOSCOP).
- This sentence suffers from verbosity.
- Write shorter sentences.
- The Marine Environment Protection A uthority...
- Chaminda senevirathne This program scheduled to be conduct as two parts.
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Chaminda senevirathneMarine Environment Protection authority has planned a capacity building programme on Oil Spill Response which is directly related to effective implementation of Oil Spill Contingency Plan of respective agencies which should be formulated by relevant agencies in compliance with National Oil Spill Contingency Plan (NOSCOP).This sentence suf
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Dear Sir/Madam,
Please correct this paragraph.
As a part of the response preparedness to oil spill contingency, we are planning to conduct a capacity building workshop and Drill on spill response on 26th and 27th May 2016.
We are planning to use harbor premises to conduct boom deployment drill. This deployment exercise will be conducted by Sri Lanka Coast Gua
Please correct this paragraph.
As a part of the response preparedness to oil spill contingency, we are planning to conduct a capacity building workshop and Drill on spill response on 26th and 27th May 2016.
We are planning to use harbor premises to conduct boom deployment drill. This deployment exercise will be conducted by Sri Lanka Coast Gua
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Your first sentence is garbled. The yellow highlighted tet is not good. . "Drill on Spill" makes no sense to me.
After an oil spill, do you drill for more oil? Do you mean drilling relief wells? That is sometimes done if the well cannot be shut off. But drilling a relief well is a much longer process than containing a spill with booms.
As a part of the response
After an oil spill, do you drill for more oil? Do you mean drilling relief wells? That is sometimes done if the well cannot be shut off. But drilling a relief well is a much longer process than containing a spill with booms.
As a part of the response
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Dear Sir/Madam,
Could you correct this please?
Kindly request you to nominate one person from each fishery harbors of Kalutara, Galle and Matara districts for the above workshop and the demonstration. The details of nominees to be submitted in attaching form (Annex 01) to reach MEPA on or before 17th May 2016.
Could you correct this please?
Kindly request you to nominate one person from each fishery harbors of Kalutara, Galle and Matara districts for the above workshop and the demonstration. The details of nominees to be submitted in attaching form (Annex 01) to reach MEPA on or before 17th May 2016.
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I am wondering about these. are ur corrections polite enough to formal letter.
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Chaminda senevirathneurThis is not a word. It is text/chat speak http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=ur and not suitable for general use.
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Chaminda senevirathne urThat is not a good word.
But the choice of words is important. Cultural standards dictate the dividing line between obsequiousness and egalitarianism.
In the US and western Europe, business correspondence is honest, factual and direct, but with a friendly tone. Each party is considered equal. In other cultures, obliquene
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