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This is a holiday card I'm planing on sending. But I'm affraid I made gammatical mistakes. (The three of them, Joey, Mike and Frank, are close friends and they are not related - if it makes any difference...)

Dear Joey, Mike and Frank,

I wish you, your families and your friends a very merry Christmas and a new year full of happiness and fulfillment. A new year is at the open with new joys and new opportunities. As they always say, carpe Diem, seize the day! Live each day to the fullest but never forget to save some time for both your bodies and souls to rest. Your friendship and loyalty to one another inspires me. Cherish what you have, I trust you won't let anything or anyone come between you.

I hope that one day I will have the pleasure of meeting you three in person.

Sending warm hugs all the way from Canda,
Tina.

Thank you so much for taking the time to read this. I would really appreciate any comment.
So thanks again, and happy holidays,
Tina.

P.S - besides the english, do you find this a suitable holiday card?

Feebs11 · Accepted Answer

TbsuktThis is a holiday card I'm planing on sending. But I'm affraid I made gammatical mistakes. (The three of them, Joey, Mike and Frank, are close friends and they are not related - if it makes any difference...)

Dear Joey, Mike and Frank,

I wish you, your families and your friends a very merry Christmas and a new year full of happiness and fulfillment. A new year is at the open with new joys and new opportunities. As they always say, carpe Diem, seize the day! Live each day to the fullest but never forget to save some time for both your bodies and souls to rest. Your friendship and loyalty to one another inspires me. Cherish what you have, I trust you won't let anything or anyone come between you.

I hope that one day I will have the pleasure of meeting you three in person.

Sending warm hugs all the way from Canda,
Tina.

Thank you so much for taking the time to read this. I would really appreciate any comment.
So thanks again, and happy holidays,
Tina.

P.S - besides the english, do you find this a suitable holiday card?

If you are sending this message to three discrete families [Joey's, Mike's and Franks's], then each should receive a directly addressed communication. It is not really polite to send it addressed to all three -unless they all live together, of course..

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Feebs11
TbsuktThis is a holiday card I'm planing on sending. But I'm affraid I made gammatical mistakes. (The three of them, Joey, Mike and Frank, are close friends and they are not related - if it makes any difference...)

Dear Joey, Mike and Frank,

I wish you, your families and your friends a very merry Christmas and a new year full of happiness and fulfillment. A new year is at the open with new joys and new opportunities. As they always say, carpe Diem, seize the day! Live each day to the fullest but never forget to save some time for both your bodies and souls to rest. Your friendship and loyalty to one another inspires me. Cherish what you have, I trust you won't let anything or anyone come between you.

I hope that one day I will have the pleasure of meeting you three in person.

Sending warm hugs all the way from Canda,
Tina.

Thank you so much for taking the time to read this. I would really appreciate any comment.
So thanks again, and happy holidays,
Tina.

P.S - besides the english, do you find this a suitable holiday card?
If you are sending this message to three discrete families [Joey's, Mike's and Franks's], then each should receive a directly addressed communication. It is not really polite to send it addressed to all three -unless they all live together, of course..

Thank you for your comment Feebs. You made a good point, I think I will send three different cards (in that case, is it correct to say "I wish you, your family and your friends a very merry Christmas and a new year full of happiness and fulfillment"?). When I come to think of it though , even if I send three cards they will all be sent to the exact same address (same PO box), it feels a bit funny sending three cards to the same address (but then again they don't all live together).

Anyway, other than that, are there any other mistakes?

Thank you so much,
Tina.

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