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Anonymous Posted 19 years ago
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Hi,

Please correct this.

Thank you for coming to our 16th Employee Picnic. This event is held annually to promote our company employees' comradeship. Especially, I hope you all will enjoy our talent contest, which will be held after lunch. Our much anticipated talent context will be opened for groups/teams and no sole performance will be allowed.

Please note that prizes will be given out for first-, second-, and third-place winning teams.

(My question: When can I use "Mind you" "Be reminded that", and etc, for the underlined part?)

Hope you all enjoy the event as our employees showcase their long-horned talents.
  

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Anonymous Hi, Please correct this. Thank you for coming to our 16th Employee Picnic. This event is held annually to promote our company employees' comradeship.

  • Anonymous Hi, Please correct this.
  • Thank you for coming to our 16th Employee Picnic.
  • This event is held annually to promote our company employees' comradeship.
  • Especially, I particularly hope you all will enjoy o ur much anticipated talent context , which will be held after lunch.
  • The talent contest will be opened [better to say "will only be"] for groups/teams and no sole performance will be allowed.
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AnonymousHi,

Please correct this.

Thank you for coming to our 16th Employee Picnic. This event is held annually to promote our company employees' comradeship. Especially, I particularly hope you all will enjoy our much anticipated talent context, which will be held after lunch.
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AnonymousHi,

Please correct this.

Thank you for coming to our 16th Employee Picnic. This event is held annually to promote our company employees' comradeship. Especially, I particularly hope you all will enjoy our much anticipated talent context, which wi
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Thank you - the phrase is ok. However, it would be probably better simply to say: "....no solo performance will be allowed. There will be prizes for first, second and third winning teams".

I would use "please note" if this was a written notice to the employees, but not if it is spoken. The same for "Be reminded that". "Mind you" is informal and best kept to conversation.

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